Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct noun/verb agreement, avoid unclear numbers or phrases (e.g. “20 opportunity”), and use precise vocabulary (e.g. “events” or “activities”). Keep the answer to no more than 4–5 sentences.

例: Yes — I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, my friends and I often organized football matches and art workshops, which helped me become more confident and more creative. Because I tried different activities, I learned to work in a team and to express myself through drawing and performance.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with reasons and an example. Use correct grammar (subject–verb agreement, articles) and linking words such as “because” or “for example.” Make your statements specific: explain what strengths people discover and how trying things helps. Keep it concise and avoid vague phrases like “suits” or “so.”

例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover their strengths and interests. For example, trying a cooking class might reveal someone’s talent for flavors, while joining a debate club could improve confidence and speaking skills.

× I have many opportunity to play in 20 opportunity with my friends while I will try.

✓ I had many opportunities to play with my friends when I was a child.

The original sentence has singular/plural errors: 'many' requires the plural noun 'opportunities' not 'opportunity'. 'In 20 opportunity' is unclear and likely incorrect; context suggests 'when I was a child' or a time reference, so replace with 'when I was a child'. Also tense should match the past 'Did you have...' so use 'had' instead of 'have'. Remove 'while I will try' because it is ungrammatical and unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'I had many opportunities to play with my friends when I was a child.'

× For example, we often organize football match and art and prop afternoon, which helps me become more confident and creative.

✓ For example, we often organized football matches and art and craft afternoons, which helped me become more confident and creative.

Multiple issues fall under conjunction and related word choice: 'organize' should be past 'organized' to match past context. 'football match' should be plural 'football matches' after 'often'. 'art and prop afternoon' is incorrect; likely 'art and craft afternoons'. 'which helps me' should be past 'which helped me' to maintain past tense. The conjunctions and list need parallel and correct nouns. Suggestion: use parallel plural nouns and past tense: 'we often organized football matches and art and craft afternoons, which helped me become more confident and creative.'

× Everyone suits have an opportunity to try as many as different things they want because each one have a personal strength so.

✓ Everyone should have an opportunity to try as many different things as they want because each person has personal strengths.

Several errors relate to verb forms and agreement. 'Everyone suits have' is incorrect: 'suits' is wrong word and 'have' disagrees with singular 'everyone'. Use modal 'should have' for recommendation. 'as many as different things' word order is wrong; correct is 'as many different things as'. 'each one have' should be 'each person has' because 'each' requires singular verb 'has'. 'personal strength so' is ungrammatical; better 'personal strengths'. Suggestion: use 'Everyone should have an opportunity to try as many different things as they want because each person has personal strengths.'