Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用简洁自然的英语直接回答问题，并注意时态一致性与句子流畅。可以把答案分成主题句和一到两句补充细节，避免拼写和发音相近词的错误（如传统乐器名称拼写）。例如把“do”改为“did”，把“take”改为“took”，并把乐器名称写清或简单描述。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I took table tennis and painting classes, and I also learned traditional Chinese instruments such as the guzheng and the erhu. These activities helped me develop coordination and an appreciation for music.

提案: 回答结构清晰、内容相关且有理由支持观点，但可以通过使用连接词分段使逻辑更清楚，并加入更具体的例子或个人经历以增强说服力。同时注意避免句子过长，分成两到三句更自然。

例: Yes, I believe people should try a wide range of activities. When we are young we often don’t know our strengths, so experimenting with sports, music or coding can help us discover talents. For instance, taking a coding class in school taught me problem-solving skills that I later used in my projects.

× Yes, I do. When I was little, I often take table tennis classes or the paint classes and other things like playing and Chinese old instrument.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was little, I often took table tennis classes or painting classes and did other things like playing an old Chinese instrument.

这里涉及时态不一致问题（Present tense issue）。句子开头用过去时间状语“When I was little”，应使用过去时，所以“do”要改为“did”，“take”要改为过去式“took”。另外“the paint classes”用法不自然，改为“painting classes”；“Chinese old instrument”词序和形容词使用不当，改为“an old Chinese instrument”。建议：看到过去时间提示词（如when I was little, last year, in 2005等）时，动词要用过去时；形容词顺序应为限定词+形容词+名词（an old Chinese instrument）。

× Its name was Gojung and also the Weiki

✓ Its name was Gayageum and also the piri.

这里原句使用了不准确或拼写错误的乐器名称并且代词“its”指代不清。根据前句应指代“an old Chinese instrument”（实际上可能指中国/韩国家的古筝等），我用更常见的亚洲古乐器举例并修正拼写。若要保持原意，应先明确指代对象并确保拼写正确。建议：确保代词有明确先行词并注意专有名词拼写；如果不确定乐器名称，可用泛指表达如“a traditional instrument”。

× Yes, I think people should try as many different activities as possible because when we are young, we often don't know our strengths for example, by experimenting with sports, music and coding, you can discover hidden talents, develop useful skills and broaden your life opportunities.

✓ Yes, I think people should try as many different activities as possible, because when we are young we often don't know our strengths. For example, by experimenting with sports, music and coding, people can discover hidden talents, develop useful skills and broaden their life opportunities.

主要问题是人称和时态不一致（Present tense issue）以及句子衔接问题。句中先用泛指“people should...”，后面又出现“you”，混用人称会导致不一致性。应保持人称一致，使用“people”或将全句改为第二人称。并把原来长句分为两句以改善衔接。建议：保持全句使用同一人称（如都用“people”或都用“you”），并注意句子分割以清晰表达思想。