Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời ngắn và thiếu rõ ràng; nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp khiến câu khó hiểu. Cần: 1) Nói rõ thời điểm và hoạt động (topic sentence). 2) Sử dụng thì đúng (past simple) và cấu trúc đầy đủ. 3) Dùng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (and, so, for example). 4) Tránh từ lặp và sửa phát âm/ từ sai (ví dụ “learn swim” → “learn to swim”, “my parents sign” có vẻ sai; có thể là “my parents signed me up”). Hãy giữ tối đa 4-5 câu, làm rõ ai làm gì, khi nào và kết quả/ấn tượng.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my parents signed me up for several classes, such as English lessons, swimming and piano. I attended those classes for about a week at a time when I was starting. As a result, I learned some basic skills and discovered that I enjoyed piano the most.

提案: Ý tưởng hợp lý nhưng diễn đạt thiếu trôi chảy và sai ngữ pháp nhiều. Cần: 1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (opinion + reason). 2) Dùng thì đúng và chia động từ (e.g. “it helps them learn”). 3) Dùng liên từ để nối lý do và ví dụ (for example, because, so). 4) Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể cho ví dụ (kể hoạt động bạn đã thử và kết quả). Giữ 3-4 câu ngắn gọn, logic.

例: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because it helps them learn new skills and discover their interests. For example, I tried painting and cooking last year, and through these experiences I found that I enjoy cooking more. Therefore, trying different things can help people make better choices about hobbies or careers.

× Yes, I did. When I watch you, my parents sign, learn English, learn swim, learn piano, and I have. A week.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was young, my parents signed me up for lessons: English, swimming, and piano. I had classes for a week.

The original sentence has several sentence structure and word choice issues: 'When I watch you' is incorrect and likely meant 'When I was young' (tense and word choice). 'My parents sign' lacks tense and object; should be 'signed me up'. 'Learn English, learn swim, learn piano' is a list but needs parallel forms and correct nouns/gerunds: 'English' (language) is fine, 'swim' should be 'swimming', and 'piano' needs 'piano lessons' or 'piano'. 'And I have. A week.' is fragmented; combine into 'I had classes for a week.' Suggestion: use complete clauses, correct past tense for past events, use gerunds or nouns for activities, and keep parallel structure in lists.

× I think people should try different things at least to some extent because it help learn.

✓ I think people should try different things at least to some extent because it helps them learn.

Errors: 'it help learn' is ungrammatical. 'Should' is used correctly as a modal, but the following clause needs subject-verb agreement and an object: 'it helps them learn' or 'it helps you learn'. Use third person singular 'helps' after 'it', and include an object 'them' or 'you'. Also ensure the infinitive 'to learn' is not needed after 'helps'. Suggestion: match the verb form to the subject and include a clear object.

× Help them learn new skill and find what they enjoy.

✓ It helps them learn new skills and find what they enjoy.

This fragment lacks a subject and proper verb agreement. Begin with a subject like 'It' (referring to trying different things) and use 'helps' for third person singular. 'New skill' should be plural 'new skills' or 'a new skill' depending on meaning. Maintain parallel structure: 'learn new skills and find what they enjoy.' Suggestion: include subject and ensure noun number matches meaning.

× For example, I try.

✓ For example, I try new activities myself.

The original 'For example, I try.' is a sentence fragment and vague. It needs an object to be complete: 'I try new activities' or 'I try different things myself.' Ensure the verb 'try' has a clear object and consider tense/context; present simple is acceptable here for a general statement. Suggestion: add the object and clarify what is being tried.