Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn về cấu trúc câu, ngữ pháp và chi tiết cụ thể. Bạn nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “signed me up for piano lessons”), tránh lặp từ (“made it made me”), dùng thì và mạo từ đúng (a long day of study). Thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về trải nghiệm (ví dụ bạn học được gì, trong bao lâu, hoặc một kỷ niệm) và dùng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc.

例: Yes. My mum signed me up for piano lessons when I was eight. I took lessons for three years, and learning to play relaxing pieces helped me unwind after a long day of study. I also enjoyed performing simple songs at family gatherings, which improved my confidence.

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, chọn từ vựng phù hợp và làm rõ ý chính. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi như “many experience” → “many experiences”, “handle with” → “deal with”, và thay cụm không rõ “a different couple” bằng từ phù hợp (ví dụ: “different situations” hoặc “different challenges”). Thêm một hoặc hai lí do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, I do. Trying different activities helps people gain many experiences and learn how to deal with different situations. For example, taking part in sports taught me teamwork, while volunteering improved my communication skills.

× Yes, my mum signed me a piano lesson.

✓ Yes, my mum signed me up for piano lessons.

The verb phrase 'sign up for' is used to register someone for an activity; using 'signed me a piano lesson' is incorrect word order and preposition. Also 'piano lessons' (plural) is more natural when talking about taking lessons over time. Suggestion: use 'signed me up for' + activity and plural 'lessons' if recurring.

× It was funny.

✓ It was fun.

'Funny' means causing laughter; 'fun' means enjoyable. In this context the speaker means they enjoyed it, so 'It was fun' is correct. Suggestion: choose 'fun' for enjoyable experiences and 'funny' for humorous ones.

× It made it made me happy and relaxed after a long day study.

✓ It made me happy and relaxed after a long day of studying.

The original repeats 'made it made' (redundant) and lacks the preposition 'of' before a gerund; 'study' should be the gerund 'studying'. Use 'after a long day of studying' and avoid duplication. Suggestion: remove the extra words and use 'of' + gerund for 'a long day of doing X'.

× Of course, I think this is necessary for people because they can have many experience to handle with a different couple in their life

✓ Of course, I think this is necessary because people can gain much experience handling different challenges in their lives.

Multiple problems: 'have many experience' should be 'gain much experience' or 'many experiences' (quantifier issue), 'to handle with' is incorrect — 'handle' is transitive and does not take 'with', and 'a different couple' is wrong contextually; likely 'different challenges' or 'different situations' is intended. Also 'in their life' should be plural 'in their lives' to agree with 'people'. Suggestion: use 'gain experience', 'handle challenges' and pluralize 'lives'.