Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., "I used to cycle"), avoid repetition ("I used to" repeated too many times), and add one or two specific examples with brief details. Use linking words like "for example" or "also" to connect ideas.

例: Yes — I had many opportunities to try different activities as a child. For example, I used to draw and took part in an art club where we learned shading and perspective. I also enjoyed singing in the school choir, which helped me become more confident performing in front of others.

提案: Improve clarity and vocabulary: begin with a direct opinion, then give two clear reasons with specific language and linking words (e.g., "because", "for instance", "as a result"). Replace vague phrases like "plus points" and "ability to solve" with precise terms such as "strengths" and "problem-solving skills." Keep it to two or three concise sentences.

例: Yes, I believe people should try many different activities because it helps them discover their strengths and interests. For instance, trying team sports can improve communication and leadership, while learning a musical instrument can boost discipline and problem-solving skills.

× I had plenty of opportunity to get to take part in different kinds of activities.

✓ I had plenty of opportunities to take part in different kinds of activities.

Plural/singular mismatch and unnecessary wording: 'plenty of' requires a plural noun here ('opportunities'). Also 'to get to take part' is wordy; use 'to take part' or 'to get to take part'. Suggestion: use 'plenty of opportunities to take part' for natural phrasing.

× I used to cycling,

✓ I used to cycle,

After 'used to' the base form of the verb is required, not the -ing form. Use 'used to cycle' for past habitual actions.

× I used to play random playing.

✓ I used to play various games.

'Play random playing' is ungrammatical: 'random' is an adjective and 'playing' is a gerund but the combination is incorrect. Use 'play various games' or 'play randomly' depending on meaning. Here 'various games' fits better.

× Our teachers used to introduce us with new games.

✓ Our teachers used to introduce us to new games.

Verb 'introduce' takes the preposition 'to' for the person or thing introduced, not 'with'. Use 'introduce us to new games'.

× I think people should try as many different things as they can because it can help them to build up their own personality.

✓ I think people should try as many different things as they can because it can help them build their own personalities.

Minor issues: 'build up' is acceptable but 'build' is more natural here. 'Personality' should be plural ('their own personalities') to match plural subject 'people.' Also maintain consistency with plural possessive.

× It will help them to learn their plus points, their ability to explore, their ability to solve.

✓ It will help them learn their strengths, their ability to explore, and their problem-solving skills.

Awkward and incorrect phrases: 'plus points' is nonstandard—use 'strengths'. 'Ability to solve' is incomplete; 'problem-solving skills' is the correct noun phrase. Also omit 'to' after 'help' when followed by a bare infinitive and add 'and' before the last item in the list for parallelism.