Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense and article errors and finish the thought. For example, use past tense consistently, replace vague phrases like “ample opportunities” with a brief concrete detail, and complete the final clause (what those instruments inspired you to do).

例: Yes. I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I learned to play the piano and guitar in high school, which inspired me to join the school band and practice regularly. As a result, I developed a lasting interest in music.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and smooth linking words. Use commas and conjunctions correctly and avoid repetition. Provide a specific example and explain the result concisely. Correct grammar: say “helps you know what you want” and “helps me form my taste.”

例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because experimenting helps you discover your interests. For instance, tasting various cuisines helped me identify which flavors I prefer, so now I choose foods more confidently and enjoy cooking new recipes.

× Yet yes, in fact I have ample opportunities to explore when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had ample opportunities to explore when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Also remove filler 'Yet' which is unnatural here. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past experiences (I had ample opportunities).

× Specifically I was exposed to different musical instruments to learn back in high school and those inspired

✓ Specifically, I was exposed to different musical instruments to learn back in high school, and those experiences inspired me.

The clause ends abruptly and lacks an object; 'inspired' needs an object (what or whom it inspired). Add 'experiences' and 'me' to complete the idea. Also add a comma after 'Specifically' and before the conjunction for clarity. The structure 'was exposed to' correctly uses past participle, but the sentence required completion and correct object pronoun.

× In my opinion, yes, because trying different things allows you to know better what you want to do specifically trying different food, for example, allows me to know better what I like and forming a taste.

✓ In my opinion, yes, because trying different things allows you to know better what you want to do. Specifically, trying different foods, for example, allows me to know better what I like and helps me form a taste.

Sentence is run-on and has tense/number issues. Split into two sentences for clarity. 'Trying different food' should be 'trying different foods' (plural) — quantifier/noun agreement. 'Forming a taste' is awkward; use 'helps me form a taste' to supply a verb and match present tense general statement. Keep present simple 'allows' to express general truth.