Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha açık, doğru dil bilgisi ve mantıklı sıra ile verilmelidir. Öncelikle soruya doğrudan ve kısa bir konu cümlesiyle cevap verin, ardından bir veya iki spesifik örnek verin ve neden hoşlandığınızı kısaca açıklayın. Ayrıca belirsiz veya hatalı kelimelerden (ör. "supermake") kaçının veya bunları netleştirin. Cümle uzunluğu 3-4 cümleyi geçmemeli. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, and) kullanılmalı fakat doğru yerlerde ve doğru şekilde kullanılmalı.

例: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I took part in a local art club where I learned painting and crafts. I enjoyed these activities because they helped me be more creative and made me feel confident in trying new things.

提案: Cevap net bir görüşle başlayıp, ardından makul gerekçeler ve bir kısa örnek ile desteklenmelidir. Şu anda cümleler karışık, tekrarlar ve dil bilgisi hataları var; bunları düzeltin. Bağlaçlar (because, for example, therefore) mantıklı şekilde kullanılmalı ve aynı fikri tekrar etmeyin. Cümleleri daha kısa ve açık tutun (maksimum 3-4 cümle).

例: Yes, I think people should try many different activities. Trying new things helps you discover interests and develop skills, for example learning a sport or a musical instrument. This can also make life more enjoyable and help you meet new people.

× Yes, I had activities for since my child for example supermake is good activities from my childhood time and I like this.

✓ Yes, I did activities when I was a child. For example, making things was a good activity from my childhood, and I liked it.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure issues, unclear chronology and incorrect word choices. Use 'when I was a child' to indicate time (correct chronological phrase). 'I did activities' is a clear simple past expression. 'Supermake' is not a standard word; likely meant 'making things' or 'crafts.' Maintain consistent tense (past) with 'was' and 'liked'. Also split into two sentences or use commas to improve clarity. Suggestion: identify the specific activity with common nouns (e.g., making crafts) and keep verbs in simple past. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I find yes all people should be trying many different new activities because they find our sports or our activities because all people had a hobby I think.

✓ Yes, I think everyone should try many different new activities because people can discover sports or hobbies they enjoy.

Problems include incorrect quantifier phrase 'all people' repeated and awkward modal progressive 'should be trying'. Use 'everyone' instead of 'all people' for naturalness. Use simple modal 'should try' rather than progressive 'should be trying' when giving general advice. Remove redundant phrases and correct tense: 'had' is wrong here; use present 'enjoy' or 'can discover' to express general truth. Suggestion: use 'everyone' and simple modal + base verb for general recommendations (should try). Grammar problem type ID:14