Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and articles), make the response more concise and natural, and add a clear topic sentence with one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, correct past tense verbs (“I took part”), include the article “a” before “child” if needed, and replace repeated phrases with a single clear phrase. Add a brief specific detail about what you learned or a memorable moment to make the answer more concrete.

例: Yes — I often took part in English recitations with a friend when I was a child. These performances helped me become more confident speaking in public, because practicing lines and speaking in front of classmates forced me to overcome my nerves.

提案: Fix grammar and word choice, begin with a clear topic sentence, and provide one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct verb forms (e.g., “make” instead of “made”), and improve phrasing (“they may not expect” instead of “they unexpected”). Avoid repeating “I think” twice. Be specific about what kinds of skills or experiences you mean.

例: Yes, I believe people should try many different activities because it creates memorable experiences and helps them gain useful skills. For instance, trying sports can improve teamwork and fitness, while learning a musical instrument can boost discipline and concentration.

× When I was child, I take part in recitation with my friend and we speak English.

✓ When I was a child, I took part in recitations with my friend and we spoke English.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'child' (article error, fits Present tense issue as sentence mixes tenses) and incorrect present tense 'take' and 'speak' used for past time reference. Correction uses simple past 'took' and 'spoke' to match 'When I was a child'. Also pluralize 'recitation' to 'recitations' to sound natural. Suggestion: Use the past tense for actions that occurred in childhood and include necessary articles: 'When I was a child, I took part in recitations with my friend and we spoke English.'

× We speak English recitation.

✓ We performed English recitations.

Error: 'English recitation' is awkward and missing article; verb tense and noun form are incorrect. Change to 'performed English recitations' to use a past action verb and plural noun, matching context. Suggestion: Use a verb that describes participation (performed/took part in) and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× I think it is a good experience for me because it makes it made me be brave.

✓ I think it was a good experience for me because it made me brave.

Errors: mixed present and past ('is' with 'made' and extra 'it'); 'makes it made me be brave' is ungrammatical. Use past 'was' to refer to a past experience and simple past 'made me brave'. Remove redundant words. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and avoid unnecessary pronouns: 'I think it was a good experience for me because it made me brave.'

× I think people should try different things as they can because I think it will made a memorable experience for them and also learn some skills that they unexpected.

✓ I think people should try different things as much as they can because it will make memorable experiences for them and also help them learn some unexpected skills.

Errors: 'as they can' missing 'much' (common collocation), modal/result clause 'will made' uses wrong past form instead of base 'make', and 'learn some skills that they unexpected' is ungrammatical: 'help them learn some unexpected skills' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'as much as they can', use base verb after modal 'will', and place 'unexpected' before 'skills'; add 'help them' to link clauses clearly.