Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子有语法错误和用词不当，且表达不够自然具体。建议： 1) 使用正确的时态和主谓一致（过去发生的事用过去时）。 2) 用更自然的动词搭配，如 "try running" 改为 "took up running" 或 "tried running"；"practice my body" 应改为具体表达如 "improve my fitness"；"prove my mind" 不自然，可改为 "strengthen my willpower" 或 "build mental strength"。 3) 给出一到两句具体细节（例如持续时间、参加的方式或感受），并用连接词（for example, which helped, because）使逻辑更清晰。

例: Yes. I took up running when I was in senior high school. I ran with the school athletics team for two years, which greatly improved my fitness and helped me build mental resilience. For example, training for competitions taught me discipline and how to push through tiredness.

提案: 回答过于笼统且重复前一句话的内容。建议： 1) 直接给出立场的同时用一至两句理由支持，避免泛泛而谈。 2) 使用更恰当的词汇，如 "broaden their horizons", "develop new skills", "build resilience"。 3) 用连接词（for instance, moreover）并举例说明新事物带来的具体好处，使回答更具体自然。

例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it broadens their horizons and helps them develop new skills. For instance, learning a musical instrument can improve concentration, while traveling can increase cultural awareness and adaptability.

× Yes, I have to try running when I was Senior High School.

✓ Yes, I tried running when I was in senior high school.

原句时态和动词短语使用不正确：“have to try”表示必须做某事，不适合表示过去的经历。应使用一般过去时“tried”来描述过去发生的动作；并且缺少介词“in”来表示“在高中时”。建议使用一般过去时描述过去的经历，注意学校名称前加小写并加介词。

× It not only can practice my body but also can it prove my mind.

✓ It not only helped to train my body but also proved my mind.

原句结构混乱且助动词使用不当。首先“not only... but also”结构中语序要并列一致；动词时态应与前句一致（过去时），因此使用“helped”或“trained”更自然；“practice my body”不是地道表达，应改为“train my body/strengthen my body”；“prove my mind”意思不明确，改为“improve my mind/strengthen my mind”更合适。建议把句子改为并列的过去时结构："It not only trained my body but also improved my mind."（它不仅锻炼了我的身体，也提高了我的意志/精神）。

× Yes, people should try new things in their life.

✓ Yes, people should try new things in their lives.

原句中“in their life”与复数主语“people”不一致。尽管“life”有时可作泛指，但与复数所有格更自然搭配复数形式“lives”。建议将“life”改为“lives”以保持主语与名词所有格的一致性。

× It can practice their endurance and improve their body and mind.

✓ It can build their endurance and improve their bodies and minds.

原句中代词和名词数不一致：“their endurance”可以，但后面“their body and mind”中“body”与复数主语不一致，应使用复数“bodies”；此外“practice endurance”不自然，应使用“build”或“improve”。建议保持代词、名词数一致并选用更地道动词："build their endurance and improve their bodies and minds."