Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng có vài lỗi ngữ pháp và một số phần lặp ý. Hãy chú ý: (1) thì động từ phải nhất quán (sử dụng quá khứ khi nói về thời thơ ấu), (2) tránh câu dài nối nhiều ý mà không có liên từ phù hợp, (3) cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: tên một trò chơi truyền thống hoặc cảm xúc chi tiết khi học đạp xe). Sử dụng tối đa 4-5 câu, bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng các liên từ như "for example", "because" hoặc "and".

例: Yes, I did. My family, especially my mother, encouraged me to try many activities when I was young. For example, I learned to ride a bike and played traditional Vietnamese games such as ô ăn quan, which helped me learn balance and social skills. Those experiences were really satisfying because they made me more confident and sociable.

提案: Ý chính rõ nhưng diễn đạt hơi mơ hồ và câu chứa lỗi logic/ngữ pháp (ví dụ "Only studying and learning could help them try new things" không hợp lý). Hãy nói trực tiếp ý kiến, giải thích lý do rõ ràng và dùng liên từ (e.g., "because", "so") để làm rõ mối liên hệ. Thêm một ví dụ hoặc kết quả cụ thể để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn. Giữ 2–4 câu ngắn gọn.

例: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. Trying new activities broadens your perspective and helps you discover hidden talents or interests. For instance, joining a club or taking a short course can lead to new friendships and career ideas.

× Yes I did, thanks to the support of my family and especially my mother, I have opportunities to learn how to ride a bike, play tugboard, board games, and the traditional games of Vietnam.

✓ Yes, I did. Thanks to the support of my family and especially my mother, I had the opportunity to learn how to ride a bike, play tug-of-war, play board games, and learn the traditional games of Vietnam.

The sentence contains incorrect usage of quantifiers and inconsistent tense. 'I have opportunities' is present tense and plural but the student is referring to past events, so use past tense 'I had the opportunity' (singular is more natural when referring to the chance to try these activities). 'Tugboard' is likely a wrong word; use 'tug-of-war'. Also separate into two sentences for clarity and parallel verbs: 'learn how to ride', 'play tug-of-war', 'play board games', 'learn the traditional games'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and use singular quantifier 'the opportunity' when speaking of a specific chance.

× That was kind of a new experience and it was really satisfying when I was a kid.

✓ That was a new experience, and it was really satisfying when I was a kid.

The phrase 'kind of' is informal and weakens the statement; grammatically it's not incorrect but stylistically removing it improves clarity. Tense usage is correct (past). Suggestion: use 'a new experience' for clarity and keep past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a kid'.

× Yes, I agree. Only studying and learning could help them try new things and experience new activities and have a new perspective about the world.

✓ Yes, I agree. Studying and learning alone cannot help them try new things; they should actively explore different activities to gain new experiences and broaden their perspective of the world.

The original sentence misuses the modal 'could' and the adverb 'only' (placement causes ambiguity). 'Only studying and learning could help them' suggests studying alone is sufficient; context likely means studying alone is not enough. Also parallel structure is weak. The corrected version clarifies meaning: 'cannot' to negate sufficiency of studying alone and recommends active exploration. Suggestion: place 'only' to modify the intended element or rephrase to avoid ambiguity, and maintain parallel structure with verbs like 'try', 'experience', 'broaden'.