Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答案总体意思清楚但存在语法和表达不自然的问题，句子较长且有重复。应直接用主题句回答问题，随后用1–2个简洁的支持细节（包括具体例子或频率），并使用连接词使衔接流畅。另外注意动词搭配（如“take me to”而不是“take me go”）、词序和单数/复数一致。

例: Yes. My parents often took me out to try new activities when I was a child. For example, I played various ball games like football and basketball, and I also learned to ride a bike and try amusement park rides.

提案: 回答结构清楚并直接回应问题，但表达可以更自然并加入连接词与原因或结果来丰富内容。避免句子碎片（例如“Some people they are shy”应改为“Some people are shy”），并给出一到两个具体理由或一个简短对比来增强说服力。控制在最多5句内。

例: It depends on the person. Some people are adventurous and enjoy trying new foods and activities because it broadens their experience, while others prefer caution and only try things when necessary to feel secure.

× my parents usually took me go out and play

✓ my parents usually took me out to play

原句中动词结构不正确，“took me go out”缺少介词和动名词/不定式结构。应使用短语“take someone out to do something”或“take someone out”来表达带某人外出，因此改为“took me out to play”。建议记住常见固定搭配并注意动词后接的形式。

× So I could approach to many new activities such as ball games, football, basketball, bikes, roller coaster, and many interesting things.

✓ So I could be exposed to many new activities such as ball games, football, basketball, cycling, roller coasters, and many other interesting things.

原句中“approach to”用法错误，英语中“approach”通常不与“to”跟可接事物表示接触；此处表达“接触到/体验到”更合适的词是“be exposed to”或“have access to”。另外名词形式和列举要一致，改为“cycling, roller coasters”并用“many other interesting things”更自然。建议学习常用动词短语（phrasal verbs）和固定搭配。

× such as ball games, football, basketball, bikes, roller coaster, and many interesting things.

✓ such as ball games — football, basketball — cycling, roller coasters, and many other interesting things.

列举项需要保持形式一致性并注意可数名词复数或单数与冠词的使用。原句中“roller coaster”应为复数“roller coasters”以与前面的复数项一致；“bikes”改为更通用的“cycling”或“bicycling”更符合活动范畴。建议注意并列名词的数一致性和恰当使用冠词。

× I think it depends on personal preferences.

✓ I think it depends on a person's personal preferences.

原句语义可理解但不够自然。“depends on personal preferences”缺少限定词，英语中通常说“depends on a person's preferences”或“depends on personal preference”。建议在表达时加上冠词或改为不可数形式“preference”。

× Some people are bold.

✓ Some people are bold;

句子本身语法正确，但与后文连接需要适当标点或连接词以形成流畅句子。建议使用分号或连接词与下一句连贯。

× But some people they are shy or they want to protect themselves, so they seldom try new things if not necessary.

✓ But some people are shy or want to protect themselves, so they seldom try new things unless it is necessary.

原句中“some people they are”存在主语重复，应去掉“they”。此外“if not necessary”不自然，改为“unless it is necessary”更符合英语习惯。建议避免重复主语并使用常见条件连接词。