Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

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Part 1

試験官

Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?

受験者

When I was a child, I had many opportunities to try new activities. My parents encouraged me to enroll in different activities like sports and music classes, and I also joined various school clubs and went to summer camps. For example, I tried swimming, hiking and creative crafts, which helped me make friends and develop my confidence.

試験官

Should people try as many different things as they can?

受験者

Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it broadens one's horizons and helps them discover new interests and talents. For example, learning a musical instrument can develop discipline and creativity while volunteering allows you to acquire practical skills and expand your social network.

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Part 1

Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?

スコア: 88.0

提案: 回答自然且信息充实,但可稍微精简、增加连贯衔接词并提供更具体的细节(例如时间、频率或具体经历),以提高表达的说服力和丰富性。另外注意句子长度不要超过五句。

例: Yes. I had many chances to try new activities as a child because my parents signed me up for weekend music lessons and summer sports camps. For instance, I attended swimming lessons twice a week and joined a summer hiking camp when I was ten, which helped me build confidence and make close friends.

Should people try as many different things as they can?

スコア: 90.0

提案: 回答清晰且有理有据,但可以用一两个连接词使论证更连贯,并加入一个简短的个人见解或具体例子来增强说服力;保持不超过五句。

例: Yes. Trying many different things broadens your horizons and helps you discover new talents. For example, when I learned the guitar I became more disciplined and creative, and volunteering at a local charity taught me teamwork and practical problem-solving skills.

文法

Pronoun reference / consistency (mapped to Incorrect use of pronouns)

× Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it broadens one's horizons and helps them discover new interests and talents.

✓ Yes, I believe people should try as many different things as possible because it broadens their horizons and helps them discover new interests and talents.

错误类型:12(Incorrect use of pronouns,代词使用不一致)。原句中先用不定代词 one 的所有格 one's,随后又用复数代词 them,造成代词参照不一致。建议在一句话中保持代词的一致性。两种改法:要么全部用泛指代词 one(…broadens one's horizons and helps one discover…),要么全部用复数代词 people/their/them(…broadens their horizons and helps them discover…)。这里根据前文使用 people,故改为 their 和 them。

重要語彙

Different— Dissimilar; Distinct; Unusual
Many— Numerous; A great/good deal of
Musical— Tuneful
New— Recently developed; Novel; Different; Additional; Reinvigorated
Possible— Feasible; Conceivable; Potential
Various— Diverse
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