Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and coherent: directly answer the question, use a topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and simple vocabulary rather than unclear phrases. For example, say whether you had opportunities, then give a brief reason or example. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words like "because" or "for example."

例: No, I did not have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I mostly stayed close to home and played with a small group of friends, so I rarely joined clubs or classes. As a result, I missed chances to learn things like music or team sports.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use natural phrasing such as "Yes, I think people should..." and provide one or two concise reasons (e.g., learning new skills, meeting people). Avoid vague fillers and keep sentences grammatical and coherent.

例: Yes, I think people should try many different activities because it helps them discover new interests and develop useful skills. For example, trying sports or art classes can improve confidence and help you meet new people.

× No not really. When I got a child, I had a listen friend and we keep our muscle grow and we just play around six and check other but we don't really have my new ITP.

✓ No, not really. When I was a child, I had a close friend and we kept exercising to build our muscles; we just played together a lot and explored things, but we didn't really try new activities.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb tense and form ('got a child' should be 'was a child' — Past tense state; Grammar Problem Type ID 6 Present tense issue and 5 Past tense issue), incorrect word choice/pronoun ('listen friend' unclear; use 'close friend' — Grammar Problem Type ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns/words), incorrect verb agreement and form ('we keep our muscle grow' should be 'we kept exercising to build our muscles' — involves verb + -ing and past tense; Grammar Problem Type ID 8 Verb + -ing form and 5 Past tense issue), unclear phrase 'play around six and check other' corrected to 'played together a lot and explored things' (sentence structure and word choice; Grammar Problem Type ID 26 Sentence structure errors and 13 Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs), and article/possessive error 'my new ITP' changed to 'try new activities' (word choice and structure; Grammar Problem Type ID 22 Article errors and 26). Suggestion: use correct past tense for childhood descriptions ('When I was a child'), choose clear nouns/adjectives ('close friend', 'exercising', 'build our muscles'), and keep simple sentence structure: subject + past verb + object; break long ideas into clauses linked by conjunctions or semicolons.

× It has to try new activities because like it also goes so you should do more before you that

✓ People should try new activities because trying them helps you learn and grow, so you should try more things when you can.

Problems: incorrect modal/auxiliary use ('It has to try' is wrong; use 'people should try' — Grammar Problem Type ID 4 Modal verb usage), awkward subject 'it' instead of 'people' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12 Incorrect use of pronouns), tense and structure issues in second part ('do more before you that' unclear; fixed to 'try more things when you can' — Grammar Problem Type ID 26 Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: use appropriate modal verbs to give advice ('should'), use a clear subject matching the meaning ('people'), and express purpose/result with conjunctions: 'because... so...' or combine into one clear sentence.