Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 직접적이고 자연스럽지만 구체성이 부족합니다. 문장을 다듬어 문법 오류(예: 단수·복수 일치, 시제)를 고치고, linking word를 추가해 이유와 구체적 활동을 설명하세요. 또한 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하되 핵심을 더 명확히 제시하면 좋습니다. 예: ‘I used to join the school sports club, which helped me develop teamwork and stay active, and I enjoyed it because I could spend time with friends.’

例: Yes, I did. I used to join the school sports club, which helped me develop teamwork and stay active, and I enjoyed it because I could spend time with friends.

提案: 의견은 분명하지만 표현이 반복적이고 작은 문법 오류(예: it make → it makes)가 있습니다. 링크 표현을 넣어 이유를 연결하고, 구체적 예시나 결과를 한 문장 더 추가해 설득력을 높이세요. 2~3문장으로 간결하게 제시하되, 다양한 어휘를 사용해 보세요.

例: Yes, I do. Trying new activities helps people gain useful skills and broaden their horizons, so for example, learning a musical instrument can improve concentration and make life more enjoyable.

× I used to take part in different activities at school like Sports Club because it helps me to spend time with my friends.

✓ I used to take part in different activities at school, like the sports club, because they helped me spend time with my friends.

The sentence mixes past habit 'used to' with present-tense 'helps' (Present tense issue ID 6) and has subject-verb agreement with 'sports club' and the pronoun 'they' (Singular and plural issue ID 1 / Subject-verb agreement ID 27). Since the action refers to past habitual activities, verbs should be in the past: 'helped' not 'helps'. 'Sports Club' as a specific club should take an article and is better lowercased as 'sports club' or 'the sports club'. 'They helped me spend' uses plural 'they' to match 'activities' or you can use 'it helped me spend' if referring to 'the sports club'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and match noun/pronoun number; remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helped' in this structure. Grammar problem type and ID: 6:Present tense issue; 1:Singular and plural issue; 27:Subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I think they should. I think it's a good idea to try new activities because it helps people to gain skills.

✓ Yes, I think they should. I think it's a good idea to try new activities because they help people gain skills.

The clause uses general present reference ('try new activities') and should use present simple 'help' for general truths; 'helps' is third person singular but the subject 'activities' is plural, so use 'help' (Third person singular issue ID 2 and Singular and plural issue ID 1). Also 'to gain' is acceptable but 'help people gain skills' is more natural (omit 'to'). Suggestion: use present simple for general statements and match verb number to the plural subject. Grammar problem type and ID: 2:Third person singular issue; 1:Singular and plural issue.

× Also it make their life more interesting.

✓ Also, it makes their lives more interesting.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement error: singular subject 'it' requires 'makes' not 'make' (Subject-verb agreement ID 27 / Third person singular issue ID 2). Additionally, 'their life' is better as 'their lives' when referring to people in general (Singular and plural issue ID 1). Add a comma after 'Also' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'makes' for third-person singular and pluralize 'life' to 'lives' when referring to multiple people. Grammar problem type and ID: 27:Subject-verb agreement; 2:Third person singular issue; 1:Singular and plural issue.