Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and completeness. Start with a full topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g., “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid sentence fragments and incorrect verb forms (use past tense: “I had”, “I could choose”). Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I had many chances to try new activities, such as painting and swimming, because my parents encouraged extracurricular classes. As a result, I developed new skills and interests that I still enjoy today.

提案: Make the answer more developed and specific by giving a reason and an example, and use linking words to connect ideas. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, they should.”) then add a reason introduced by a linking phrase such as “because” or “for example.” Use varied vocabulary (e.g., “beneficial,” “broaden one’s horizons”) rather than repeating “a lot.”

例: Yes, they should, because trying different activities can broaden your horizons and help you discover new passions. For example, joining a drama club or learning a musical instrument can improve confidence and social skills, which are useful in many areas of life.

× Yeah, in my childhood I have a lot of opportunities for chose my

✓ Yeah, in my childhood I had a lot of opportunities to choose my

The sentence describes past time 'in my childhood' so present tense 'have' is incorrect. Use past tense 'had' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). Also 'for chose my' mixes preposition and wrong verb form: use infinitive 'to choose' not past 'chose'. This involves verb form after preposition/verb (Grammar Problem Type ID 8/9) but falls mainly under tense and verb form. Suggestion: match verb tense to time markers (use 'had') and use 'to' + base verb for purpose (use 'to choose').

× Of course, I think people should try a lot of new activities.

✓ Of course, I think people should try many new activities.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable regarding modal 'should'. However the quantifier 'a lot of' is less appropriate before a countable plural noun in this formal context; 'many' is preferred (Grammar Problem Type ID 14). Keep 'should' since it correctly expresses recommendation (Grammar Problem Type ID 4). Suggestion: use 'many' with countable plural nouns for clearer, more formal expression.