Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use correct tense and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I had plenty of opportunities' and 'my mum tried her best for me'). Keep it to 2–4 sentences to be natural and effective.

例: Yes — I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child because my mum encouraged me. For example, she enrolled me in swimming and painting classes, so I could explore different interests and develop new skills. As a result, I became more confident and curious about learning.

提案: Give a direct opinion, then support it with two brief, specific reasons connected with linking words. Improve sentence boundaries and vocabulary (e.g., 'beneficial' instead of 'very good'). Mention concrete examples to make your answer more convincing.

例: Yes, I believe people should try as many things as possible because it broadens their horizons and can improve mental well-being. For instance, learning a new hobby like gardening or playing an instrument reduces stress and boosts self-esteem. Moreover, trying different activities can lead to new friendships and career opportunities.

× Yes, I think that I have pretty much opportunities to take part in my childhood and it wasn't because of my school but it was because of my mum she is trying the best for me and I try a lot of things

✓ Yes, I think that I had plenty of opportunities to take part in activities during my childhood, and it wasn't because of my school but because of my mum; she tried her best for me, and I tried a lot of things.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense verbs: 'had' (not 'have'), 'tried' (not 'is trying'), and 'tried' (not 'try'). Also 'pretty much opportunities' is ungrammatical; use 'plenty of opportunities'. Punctuation is needed to separate clauses; use a semicolon or conjunctions. Suggestion: keep all verbs describing past events in the past tense and use correct noun phrases (plenty of opportunities) and proper clause punctuation. ','grammar_problem_type_id':6},{