Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、時態一致並增加具體細節。避免語法錯誤（例如時態和冠詞），並把句子分成主句和支持句，使用連接詞讓邏輯更清楚。例如說明參加比賽的頻率、年齡、學到的具體技能或印象深刻的經歷。保持不超過五句。

例: Yes. As a child I often took part in violin competitions from the age of eight to fourteen. These events improved my musical sense and helped me develop performance confidence. For example, competing taught me how to manage stage nerves and practise effectively. I also made friends with other young musicians through rehearsals and ensembles.

提案: 回答需更自然和語法正確，使用清楚的主題句並用連接詞展開支持點。避免模糊表達（如“exposure from the public”），改為具體說明好處：擴展視野、學到技能、建立人脈。提供一兩個具體例子或原因來支持觀點，並控制在五句內。

例: Absolutely. Trying different activities broadens people's horizons and helps them discover new interests. For instance, joining a sports club can improve teamwork and health, while volunteering can build communication skills. These experiences also create useful networks that may help in future study or work.

× Yes, I have lots of opportunities to take part in violin competitions which offered me a good sense of music and to get along with others.

✓ Yes, I had lots of opportunities to take part in violin competitions, which offered me a good sense of music and helped me get along with others.

错误类型：复数与动词时态搭配问题以及从句动作表达不清。说明：原句开头用了过去时“Did you have…?”，回答中应使用过去时态，所以“have”应改为“had”。此外，定语从句中动词“offered”是过去时，前后保持一致。最后一部分“to get along with others”结构不平行，改为“helped me get along with others”更自然且与前面过去时一致。建议：在回答过去发生的事时，全句使用过去时；保持从句和主句时态一致；确保并列结构平行。

× Absolutely explore different activities could broaden people's horizons to gain exposure from the public. That will be a good chance to explore the network connections.

✓ Absolutely. Exploring different activities can broaden people's horizons and help them gain exposure to the public. It is also a good chance to build a network of connections.

错误类型：句子结构错误与动名词/动词不定式使用不当。说明：原句缺少连贯的句子结构，开头直接用“Absolutely explore...”导致主语和谓语不匹配。应使用动名词形式“Exploring”或添加助动词“can”并将动词改为原形。短语“gain exposure from the public”介词使用不当，正确常用搭配是“gain exposure to the public”。“explore the network connections”不自然，改为“build a network of connections”更贴切。建议：确保句子有明确主语和谓语；使用正确的动名词或情态动词结构；注意常见搭配和固定搭配表达。