Opportunities— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and irrelevant words. Give a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Use correct verb forms and avoid unrelated words. Aim for 2–4 short sentences, e.g. state whether you had opportunities, name one or two activities, and explain briefly how they helped you.

例: Yes, I had several chances to try new activities as a child. For example, I took swimming lessons and joined a weekend art club, which helped me become more confident and improve coordination. As a result, I developed better concentration and enjoyed learning new skills.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and does not clearly state your opinion or reasons. Start with a clear opinion sentence (yes or no), then give one or two concise reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Keep sentences short and specific with relevant vocabulary.

例: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover interests and develop new skills. For example, trying different jobs or hobbies can reveal hidden talents and make people more adaptable in their careers.

× Are you bison's have any opportunity to take part in a new activities as a child?

✓ Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extra/incorrect words ('Are you bison's') and wrong article/number ('a new activities'). This is a sentence structure error: the question should use past simple 'Did you have' to match the time frame 'as a child' and 'opportunities' should be plural without 'a'. Remove unrelated words. Suggestion: use 'Did you have any opportunities to take part in new activities as a child?'.

× So yeah, I definitely doing some activities for myself because this is benefit for myself and when I do some activities then my muscles and memories are very good for.

✓ So yeah, I definitely did some activities for myself because they were beneficial, and when I did activities my muscles and memory were better.

Errors include missing auxiliary for continuous/past ('I definitely doing' should be 'I definitely did' or 'I was definitely doing') and incorrect noun forms ('this is benefit' should be 'they were beneficial' or 'this was beneficial'), and awkward phrasing ('memories are very good for'). According to the list, fix verb + -ing misuse by using correct past simple 'did' to match past time frame. Also change pluralization and word choice: 'memory' (uncountable) and 'better' for comparative. Suggest practicing correct past forms and proper collocations like 'beneficial' and 'memory'.

× Yes, you can say so many people's say different things because I don't know what are people saying because so many people are different and different things because everyone mindset, so everyone people listening.

✓ Yes, you can say many people say different things because I don't know what people are saying; so many people have different mindsets and everyone listens to different opinions.

Problems include incorrect modal/auxiliary use and sentence structure: 'you can say so many people's say' is ungrammatical. This is a modal/auxiliary and sentence structure issue — replace with 'many people say' and correct present simple 'people are saying' for ongoing action. Also fix pluralization and noun phrases: 'mindsets' (plural) and 'listen' -> 'listen to'. Use semicolons or separate clauses to improve clarity. Suggest practicing forming subject + verb patterns and using correct verbs for 'say' and 'listen to'.