Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你直接回答了问题，也说明了疲惫的原因，但第二句过长，多个想法挤在一起，影响自然度。建议用 because 说明课程和作业带来的压力，并用 for example 引出具体课程；“take a lot of courses in my school”可改为“take a lot of courses at university”。

例: Yes, I often feel tired because I have a busy schedule at university. For example, I have several classes, including maths and English, and then I still need to finish my homework. By the end of the day, I usually feel worn out.

提案: 回答切题，也给出了晚睡这一原因，但句子过长且有明显语法和搭配问题。“have just wake up”应改为“have just woken up”；“make a coffee”可说“make a cup of coffee”，“face the new challenges in our new day”则不够自然。建议拆成两三句，并使用具体时间或习惯补充说明。

例: I usually feel tired just after I wake up, especially when I’ve gone to bed late the night before. I often make a cup of coffee to help me feel more alert. It usually takes me a little while to get going in the morning.

提案: 你给出了早上和下午两种应对方式，内容具体且切题。不过，“just as I say before”应为“as I mentioned earlier”；“in afternoon”应为“in the afternoon”，“have a sleep”更自然的说法是“take a nap”。建议使用 First/If... then... 等表达让两种情况更清楚。

例: If I feel tired in the morning, I usually make a cup of coffee, as I mentioned earlier. In the afternoon, if I’m really exhausted, I try to take a short nap. It helps me feel more refreshed afterward.

提案: 你表达了疲惫时更喜欢独处的想法，但开头“I guess not even if I am not tired”逻辑不清，后半句也略显重复。建议先直接回答，再说明自己平时就偏好小范围社交，并举一个休息方式作为具体细节。“I do not prefer”可改为“I don’t really enjoy”。

例: Usually, I don’t go out with my friends when I’m tired. In fact, I don’t really enjoy going out in large groups, even when I have plenty of energy. I’d rather stay home, relax, and recharge on my own.

× I often feel tired when I have just wake up because I usually get to bed very late and I will feel exhausted when I wake up and then I have to make a coffee to face the new challenges in our new day.

✓ I often feel tired when I have just woken up because I usually get to bed very late and I will feel exhausted when I wake up and then I have to make a coffee to face the new challenges in our new day.

“have”后面需要接动词的过去分词。“wake”的过去分词是“woken”，所以应改为“have just woken up”。

× If I feel exhausted in the morning, I often make a cup of coffee just as I say before and if I feel especially tired in afternoon I usually go to bed and have a sleep

✓ If I feel exhausted in the morning, I often make a cup of coffee just as I say before, and if I feel especially tired in the afternoon, I usually go to bed and have a sleep.

表示一天中的下午时，通常说“in the afternoon”，需要在“afternoon”前加定冠词“the”。

× If I feel exhausted in the morning, I often make a cup of coffee just as I say before and if I feel especially tired in afternoon I usually go to bed and have a sleep

✓ If I feel exhausted in the morning, I often make a cup of coffee just as I said before and if I feel especially tired in the afternoon I usually go to bed and have a sleep.

“as I say before”指的是之前已经说过的内容，应使用一般过去时“said”，而不是一般现在时“say”。更自然的说法也可以是“as I mentioned before”。