Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答频率，再用一两个具体原因补充即可。“always”语气过于绝对，可以换成“quite often”。“prepare a very important exam for me”不自然，可改为“prepare for an important exam”；避免重复表达“feel tired”。最后的“I am a very am alone”语法和意思都不清楚，建议删除或明确表达真实想法。整体控制在两到三句，并用“especially”或“also”连接细节。

例: Yes, I feel tired quite often, especially when I’m preparing for an important exam. I also get tired after playing volleyball or table tennis with my friends.

提案: 回答与上一题有重复，可以保留相同主题，但应加入清晰、具体的时间或情境。“when I prepare when I prepare”是明显重复；“prepare a mathematics exam”应改为“prepare for a maths exam”。第二句包含多个内容，建议拆分，并用“for example”或“as well as”组织细节。避免再次使用“always feel tired”，让表达更简洁自然。

例: I usually feel tired when I’ve been studying for a long time, especially before a maths exam. I also feel worn out after playing volleyball with my friends.

提案: 开头已经回答了问题，可以直接说明你会做什么，再解释这些活动如何帮助你放松。“chatting with them giving me can help me relax”结构错误，可改为“chatting with them helps me relax”。“Moreover”后面缺少清晰的句子连接；“it’s a good way to me”应改为“it’s a good way for me to relax”。注意避免重复使用“when I feel tired”。

例: When I feel tired, I usually chat with my friends because it helps me relax. I also listen to music, which is a good way to unwind.

提案: 先清楚回答“通常不出去”，再补充你更喜欢的休息方式。“I was a low energetic person”不自然，可改为“I don’t have much energy”或“I’m a low-energy person”。“stay at home alone and watching”应保持动词形式一致，例如“stay at home, watch TV and listen to music”；“listen music”需要改为“listen to music”。最后一句可以具体说明待在家里如何让你恢复精力。

例: Usually, I’d rather not go out with my friends when I’m tired because I don’t have much energy. I prefer to stay at home, watch TV and listen to music in bed, as that helps me recharge.

× Yes, I always feel tired, especially when I need to prepare a very important exam for me and when I do some sports like playing volleyball or playing table tennis with my friends.

✓ Yes, I always feel tired, especially when I need to prepare for a very important exam and when I do some sports like playing volleyball or playing table tennis with my friends.

表示“为考试做准备”时，prepare 后面要接介词 for，即 prepare for an exam。这里的 for me 多余；如果想表达“对我来说很重要”，可以说 an exam that is very important to me。

× You know, I am a very am alone.

✓ You know, I am alone.

原句中 a very am 的词序和结构都不成立。alone 可以作表语形容词，直接放在 be 动词后面，不需要冠词 a。

× As I said, I always feel tired when I need to prepare for a very important exam for me.

✓ As I said, I always feel tired when I need to prepare for a very important exam.

prepare for an exam 才表示“为考试做准备”。句末的 for me 在这里多余；若要表达考试对自己很重要，可说 an exam that is very important to me。

× For example when I prepare when I prepare a mathematics exam I always feel tired in the library and after doing sports like playing volleyball with my friends I also feel tired.

✓ For example, when I prepare for a mathematics exam, I always feel tired in the library, and I also feel tired after doing sports like playing volleyball with my friends.

表示“准备一场考试”时，应使用 prepare for an exam，而不是 prepare an exam。原句中的重复属于口语重复，不是此处所标注的语法错误；修改句中为便于阅读将重复内容删去。

× Personally speaking, when I feel tired, I always chat with my friends because chatting with them giving me can help me relax.

✓ Personally speaking, when I feel tired, I always chat with my friends because chatting with them can help me relax.

chatting with them 后面已经可以直接接谓语 can help。giving me 插入后使句子出现多余且结构不完整的成分，应删去。

× Moreover, I also listen to some music when I feel tired it's a good way to me.

✓ Moreover, I also listen to some music when I feel tired; it's a good way for me to relax.

表示“对我来说是一个好方法”时，应说 a good way for me，而不是 a good way to me。通常还要补充方法的目的，例如 to relax。

× To be honest, when I feel tired I wouldn't go out with my friends because as I said, I was a low energetic person.

✓ To be honest, when I feel tired, I wouldn't go out with my friends because, as I said, I am not a very energetic person.

这里描述的是目前通常的性格或状态，不是过去的状态，因此应使用现在时 am，而不是过去时 was。

× To be honest, when I feel tired I wouldn't go out with my friends because as I said, I was a low energetic person.

✓ To be honest, when I feel tired, I wouldn't go out with my friends because, as I said, I am not a very energetic person.

low energetic 不是自然、正确的形容词搭配。可以改为 not very energetic（不太有活力的）；也可以说 a low-energy person。

× I prefer to stay at home alone and watching TV in my bedroom and listen music on my bed.

✓ I prefer to stay at home alone, watch TV in my bedroom, and listen to music on my bed.

prefer to stay 后面并列的动作应保持一致的动词形式，因此使用 stay、watch、listen。watching 与其他并列动词形式不一致，应改为 watch。

× I prefer to stay at home alone and watching TV in my bedroom and listen music on my bed.

✓ I prefer to stay at home alone, watch TV in my bedroom, and listen to music on my bed.

listen 是不及物动词，表示“听某物”时必须加介词 to，因此应说 listen to music，不能说 listen music。