Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答是否经常疲惫，再说明主要原因。注意语法：用“the main reason is”，而不是“the most reasons”；“motivation”通常不可数，且“add motivation”不适合表达保持精力。可用“stay motivated”或“keep myself energized”。补充运动和旅行时，说明它们为何让你疲惫或如何恢复精力，并用连接词串联。

例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a busy day. I play basketball and football regularly, and I also enjoy travelling, so I sometimes use up a lot of energy. To stay energized, I try to get enough sleep and take breaks.

提案: 用完整句直接回答，例如“I usually feel tired during final exam week.”随后解释复习时间长、科目多或压力大。注意句首大写；“pass my final exam week”表达不自然，应说“prepare for my final exams”或“pass my exams”。避免重复“during this week”，并用“because”连接原因。

例: I usually feel tired during final exam week because I have to study for several subjects, including economics and finance. I often spend long hours reviewing my notes, which can be quite stressful. I try to take short breaks so I can concentrate better.

提案: 直接说最常做的一两件事，不要用“Maybe”反复开头。注意完整句结构，例如“I usually listen to music”；“a truly answer”应改为“a clear answer”，“the most way”可改为“the best way”，“reduce my tired”应改为“reduce my tiredness”或“feel less tired”。可以说明这些做法如何帮助你放松，并用“but”或“because”连接。

例: When I feel tired, I usually listen to relaxing music or take a short nap. Music helps me unwind, but if I’m really exhausted, getting a good night’s sleep is the best solution. I feel much more refreshed afterwards.

提案: 先明确回答“Yes”或“No”，再解释和朋友见面如何改善心情。注意时态一致：描述习惯用“I tell my friends”，不要用“told”；“reduce my tired”应改为“feel less tired”或“lift my mood”。避免重复“my friend”，并将过长的句子拆开。表达共同活动时，可说“play mobile games together”或“go somewhere together”。

例: Yes, I sometimes go out with my friends when I feel tired, as spending time with them helps lift my mood. I can talk to them about what’s bothering me, and they often give me helpful advice. We might play mobile games or go for a short walk together, so I usually feel happier afterwards.

× I think the most reasons is that I'm only twenty years old and I love doing sports such as basketball, baseball and football.

✓ I think the main reason is that I'm only twenty years old and I love doing sports such as basketball, baseball and football.

“Most”不能这样直接修饰“reasons”来表达“主要原因”。这里应使用“main reason”（主要原因）。

× I think the most reasons is that I'm only twenty years old and I love doing sports such as basketball, baseball and football.

✓ I think the main reason is that I'm only twenty years old and I love doing sports such as basketball, baseball and football.

原句中的“reasons”是复数，不能与单数动词“is”搭配。修改为单数“reason”后，使用“is”才符合主谓一致。

× I also love travelling, so I must add as many motivation so I not always feel tired.

✓ I also love travelling, so I must find as much motivation as possible so that I don't always feel tired.

“Motivation”通常是不可数名词，应使用“much”，而不是修饰可数名词复数的“many”。表达“尽可能多的动力”时，可以说“as much motivation as possible”。

× I also love travelling, so I must add as many motivation so I not always feel tired.

✓ I also love travelling, so I must find as much motivation as possible so that I don't always feel tired.

一般现在时的否定句需要助动词“do”。主语是“I”，所以应使用“don't feel”，不能说“I not feel”。

× of course during my final exam week.

✓ Of course, I feel tired during my final exam week.

原句只是一个时间短语，没有完整的主语和谓语，因此不是完整句子。补上“I feel tired”后，句子结构完整。

× Maybe listen to music, maybe play mobile games, I don't have a truly answer, but I think the most way to reduce my tired is get a good sleep.

✓ Maybe I listen to music or play mobile games. I don't have a clear answer, but I think the best way to reduce my tiredness is to get a good night's sleep.

“Maybe listen”和“maybe play”缺少主语，且原句用逗号连接多个完整意思，结构不完整。说完整句时应补上主语“I”，并可用“or”连接两个选择。后半句中“is get”也缺少不定式标记“to”，应说“is to get”。

× Maybe listen to music, maybe play mobile games, I don't have a truly answer, but I think the most way to reduce my tired is get a good sleep.

✓ Maybe I listen to music or play mobile games. I don't have a clear answer, but I think the best way to reduce my tiredness is to get a good night's sleep.

“Truly”是副词，不能直接修饰名词“answer”；这里可以用形容词“clear”修饰名词。另一个短语“my tired”把形容词“tired”当作名词使用了，应改为名词“tiredness”。

× Maybe listen to music, maybe play mobile games, I don't have a truly answer, but I think the most way to reduce my tired is get a good sleep.

✓ Maybe I listen to music or play mobile games. I don't have a clear answer, but I think the best way to reduce my tiredness is to get a good night's sleep.

“The most way”不是正确的最高级表达。表示“最好的方法”时，应使用“the best way”。

× Maybe listen to music, maybe play mobile games, I don't have a truly answer, but I think the most way to reduce my tired is get a good sleep.

✓ Maybe I listen to music or play mobile games. I don't have a clear answer, but I think the best way to reduce my tiredness is to get a good night's sleep.

在“the best way ... is ...”结构中，后面用不定式说明方法时应说“is to get”，不能直接说“is get”。

× Yes, and I think it's a good way to reduce my tired.

✓ Yes, and I think it's a good way to reduce my tiredness.

“Tired”是形容词，不能在这里直接放在“my”后面作名词。表示“疲劳”时应使用名词“tiredness”。

× When I feel tired, I told it to my friend, my friend will give me some advice about how to reduce it and he will play with me, we can't play mobile games, we can't travel in together so now I will feel happy.

✓ When I feel tired, I tell my friend about it. My friend will give me some advice about how to reduce it and will play with me. We can't play mobile games, and we can't travel together, so I will feel happy.

“When I feel tired”描述的是一般情况下会发生的事，因此后面的习惯性动作也应使用一般现在时“tell”，而不是过去时“told”。

× When I feel tired, I told it to my friend, my friend will give me some advice about how to reduce it and he will play with me, we can't play mobile games, we can't travel in together so now I will feel happy.

✓ When I feel tired, I tell my friend about it. My friend will give me some advice about how to reduce it and will play with me. We can't play mobile games, and we can't travel together, so I will feel happy.

“Travel together”表示“一起旅行”，其中不需要介词“in”。因此应删除“in”。

× When I feel tired, I told it to my friend, my friend will give me some advice about how to reduce it and he will play with me, we can't play mobile games, we can't travel in together so now I will feel happy.

✓ When I feel tired, I tell my friend about it. My friend will give me some advice about how to reduce it and will play with me. We can't play mobile games, and we can't travel together, so I will feel happy.

原句用逗号连接了多个可以独立成句的分句，形成逗号拼接。应拆分成几个句子，或使用合适的连词连接，使句子结构清楚。