Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then explain that exercising several times a week makes you tired. Correct the grammar: say “I’m interested in fitness” rather than “I interest with fitness,” and “I exercise” rather than “I make some exercise.” Avoid repeating the same idea, and use a natural frequency phrase such as “three or four times a week.”

例: Yes, I do, especially after exercising. I’m interested in fitness, so I work out three or four times a week, and that can leave me feeling tired.

提案: Give a clear answer with two understandable situations, such as after going to the gym or not getting enough sleep. Use “go to the gym” and “disrupt my sleep schedule” instead of “go out to gym” and “quit my sleeping cycle.” Remove the unclear ending and connect your reasons with “also.”

例: I usually feel tired after a demanding workout. I also feel exhausted when I don’t get enough sleep or my sleep schedule is disrupted.

提案: The question asks what you do when you feel tired, so explain your response or routine rather than mainly describing which exercises cause tiredness. You could say that you rest, drink water, or choose a gentler activity. Use “make it to 20 repetitions” or “do 20 reps,” and keep verb forms parallel: “walking or running.”

例: When I feel tired after a workout, I take a short break and drink some water. I find pull-ups and push-ups particularly tiring, so I might switch to a gentle walk until I feel better.

提案: Your answer gives a clear response and a reason, but some phrases are unnatural. Say “a special occasion” instead of “special dates,” “I prefer to go out” instead of “I prefer go out,” and explain that spending time with friends is important to you. Use a linking phrase such as “However” to make the contrast clearer.

例: Usually, I stay in when I’m tired. However, I’ll still go out if there’s a special occasion because spending time with my friends is important to me.

× I'm often really feel tired

✓ I often feel really tired.

The sentence describes a regular experience, so use the present simple feel. Do not use am before the main verb feel.

× I interest with umm, gym, umm, fitness.

✓ I'm interested in the gym and fitness.

Use the past participle interested as an adjective to describe how you feel. The phrase interest with is not grammatically correct.

× I interest with umm, gym, umm, fitness.

✓ I'm interested in the gym and fitness.

The adjective interested is followed by in, not with. Remember the fixed expression interested in something.

× So umm, 3 or 4 days in a week.

✓ So, I go to the gym three or four days a week.

The original is a fragment because it has no verb. Include a subject and a verb to make a complete sentence.

× I'm often feeling tired.

✓ I often feel tired.

This describes a habitual feeling, so the present simple feel is more appropriate than the present progressive am feeling.

× When I go out to gym, I feel tired.

✓ When I go out to the gym, I feel tired.

Use the definite article the before gym when referring to the place where people exercise.

× You need to take care if you make.

✓ You need to take care of yourself when you exercise.

The original ends with an incomplete clause: make needs an object, and the intended meaning is unclear. Complete the thought by specifying what the person should take care of and when.

× Especially some exercises, umm, feels me tired.

✓ Some exercises, especially pull-ups and push-ups, make me feel tired.

The subject exercises is plural, so it cannot take the singular verb feels. Use make with the plural subject.

× When I try to make up to 20 counts, I'm feeling tired.

✓ When I try to do up to 20 reps, I feel tired.

This describes what happens regularly when you exercise, so use the present simple feel rather than the present progressive I'm feeling.

× When I walk or running, it's OK.

✓ When I walk or run, it's OK.

The verbs joined by or should have the same form. Use the base form run to match walk.

× If there is any special activity or special dates for me

✓ If there are any special activities or special dates for me

The sentence refers to plural possibilities, so use plural nouns consistently: activities and dates.

× If there is any special activity or special dates for me

✓ If there are any special activities or special dates for me

Use are with the plural items activities and dates in this there be construction.

× I prefer umm, go out

✓ I prefer going out.

When prefer is followed by a gerund, use the -ing form: going. You can also say prefer to go out.

× Relationships and friendly comments important for me.

✓ Relationships and friendly comments are important to me.

The original sentence has no main verb. Add are to link the subject to the adjective important.