Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你直接回答了问题，也给出了“很忙”这一原因，但有明显的语法和词语搭配问题。应说“a lot of work”而不是“a lot of jobs”，并将“know time”改为“have no time”。此外，句子中重复使用两个“because”，影响表达的自然度。可以先给出明确观点，再补充具体原因和结果。

例: Yes, I often feel tired, mainly because I have a lot of work to do. I sometimes have no time to eat lunch or dinner, especially when I have a busy schedule. By the end of the day, I usually feel completely exhausted.

提案: 你的回答没有准确说明“什么时候”感到疲惫，而是重复了前一个问题的原因。应使用现在时，例如“I feel tired when...”，并具体说明时间或情境。注意使用“a lot of work”，以及正确的动名词并列形式；“saving”在这里不合适，如果想表达做饭，应使用“cooking”。

例: I usually feel tired in the evening, after I finish all my daily chores. I have to do the washing, clean the house, and cook dinner. I feel especially exhausted when I have to do these things after a long day at work.

提案: 你提供了多个具体活动，如听音乐、去公园和看电影，内容比较丰富。但需要改正动词形式：“I always listen/watch”，而不是“I always listening/watching”；“realize myself”应改为“relax”或“clear my mind”，“fill fresh air”应改为“get some fresh air”。建议减少“always”的重复，并使用“usually”或“if”连接细节，使表达更自然。

例: When I feel tired, I usually listen to music to relax and clear my mind. If the weather is nice, I go to the park and walk my dog to get some fresh air. Otherwise, I stay at home and watch a movie.

提案: 你回答了“有时会”，并解释了疲惫时想待在家的原因，基本切题。但“Sometimes I will”不如“Sometimes I do”自然；“want lying”应改为“want to lie”，而“play my phone”应改为“play on my phone”。你还可以补充一个对比条件，说明什么时候会和朋友出去，什么时候不会。

例: Sometimes I do, but it depends on how tired I am. If I am only a little tired, I might meet my friends because socializing helps me relax. However, if I am exhausted, I prefer to lie in bed and watch videos on my phone.

× Every time I felt tired because of lot of job I needed to do everything including washing, cleaning, saving.

✓ I feel tired whenever I have a lot of jobs to do, including washing, cleaning, and saving.

问题是在描述通常发生的情况时使用了过去式 felt 和 needed。这里应使用一般现在时 feel 和 have，表示习惯或经常发生的情况。

× Every time I felt tired because of lot of job I needed to do everything including washing, cleaning, saving.

✓ I feel tired whenever I have a lot of jobs to do, including washing, cleaning, and saving.

lot of 后面通常需要接可数名词复数，因此 job 应改为 jobs。也可以使用不可数名词 work，例如 a lot of work。

× Every time I felt tired because of lot of job I needed to do everything including washing, cleaning, saving.

✓ I feel tired whenever I have a lot of jobs to do, including washing, cleaning, and saving.

lot of 前面缺少冠词 a。正确表达是 a lot of jobs。表示“很多”时，应注意 a lot of、many 和 much 的搭配规则。

× I always listening to music to realize myself or go out to fill fresh air and I always walk the dog in the park. If I don't want to go out, I always watching movies.

✓ I always listen to music to realize myself or go out to fill fresh air, and I always walk the dog in the park. If I don't want to go out, I always watch movies.

always 表示习惯性动作时，后面的主要动词应使用一般现在时原形：listen 和 watch，不能使用 listening 和 watching。只有在进行时结构中才使用 -ing，例如 I am listening。

× Sometimes I will because if I feel very tired I don't want to go out. I just want lying on the bed and play my phone.

✓ Sometimes I do, but if I feel very tired, I don't want to go out. I just want to lie on the bed and play on my phone.

问题是在回答经常性习惯时使用了将来时 will。题目使用一般现在时 do you still go out，因此回答习惯时用 Sometimes I do 更自然、时态也更一致。

× Sometimes I will because if I feel very tired I don't want to go out. I just want lying on the bed and play my phone.

✓ Sometimes I do, but if I feel very tired, I don't want to go out. I just want to lie on the bed and play on my phone.

want 后面应接带 to 的不定式，即 want to lie，不能说 want lying。类似结构包括 want to go、want to sleep 和 want to rest。

× Sometimes I will because if I feel very tired I don't want to go out. I just want lying on the bed and play my phone.

✓ Sometimes I do, but if I feel very tired, I don't want to go out. I just want to lie on the bed and play on my phone.

英语中表示使用手机进行活动时，通常说 play on my phone，而不是 play my phone。play on 后面可以接手机、电脑等电子设备。