Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly in a complete sentence and avoid informal or uncertain phrases such as “or whatever.” Explain one clear reason and finish your answer instead of stopping at “I use.” Use correct punctuation and capitalization. You could also avoid repeating “feel tired” by using expressions such as “become exhausted” or “run out of energy.”

例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after studying for several hours. Because I have ADHD, it can be difficult for me to concentrate for a long time, which leaves me mentally exhausted. When I finish studying, I usually take a short break or a nap to recharge.

提案: Give a direct answer using a specific situation, such as studying for exams or working for several hours. Avoid repeating information from the previous answer and correct the inaccurate wording “get chance” to “get the chance.” Use “ADHD,” not “ADSD,” and say “take a break” rather than “breakout session.” Also, “recover from tiredness” is less natural than “regain my energy.”

例: I usually feel tired after long study sessions, particularly when I have to concentrate on a difficult subject. Since I have ADHD, maintaining my attention for a long time can be mentally exhausting. When this happens, I take a short break or a nap to regain my energy.

提案: Mention your main response first and support it with one or two details. Avoid the awkward repetition in “Also recently I've been into exercising lately” and complete the unfinished sentence after “try.” The phrase “regulate my nervous system” sounds overly technical for this simple question; more natural alternatives include “clear my mind” and “feel calmer.”

例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap because it helps me relax and feel refreshed. Recently, I have also started exercising, especially going for a light walk. It gives me more energy and helps me clear my mind.

提案: Start with a clear answer and explain your preference concisely. “Avoid hangouts” should be changed to “avoid hanging out,” “drains my whole energy” to “uses up all my energy,” and “my social battery just becomes low” to “my social battery runs low.” Finish the final sentence and avoid repeating the same idea about being unable to focus. You could briefly mention that you sometimes suggest rescheduling instead.

例: No, I usually stay at home when I feel exhausted because going out uses up even more energy. I also find it difficult to concentrate on conversations when I am tired. Therefore, I normally reschedule the plan and meet my friends when I feel more refreshed.

× So whenever I get chance I take a nap or breakout session to recover from tiredness.

✓ So whenever I get a chance, I take a nap or a breakout session to recover from tiredness.

The singular countable noun chance requires the indefinite article a. Breakout session is also a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a before singular countable nouns when referring to one nonspecific item or occasion.