Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid repetition. Correct the grammar in “I sometimes fell asleep” and replace the unclear phrase “after just alive at home” with “as soon as I arrive home.” Use one specific reason or result to make the answer more effective.

例: Yes, I sometimes feel tired, especially after working hard. When I arrive home, I often feel exhausted and fall asleep almost immediately. However, I usually feel better after getting a good night's sleep.

提案: Use a clear sentence structure when explaining the cause: “Because I work as a researcher, I feel tired after reading many academic articles.” The phrase “because it’s so beautiful” is inappropriate or unclear in this context; explain that the articles are difficult, lengthy, or require intense concentration. Avoid unnecessary repetition and grammatical interruptions.

例: I usually feel tired after a long day at work. Since I’m a researcher, I often have to read many academic articles, which requires a lot of concentration. As a result, I feel mentally exhausted by the end of the day.

提案: Give a complete answer and avoid restarting the sentence. Replace “eat with many with much amount of food” with the natural expression “eat a substantial meal” or simply “have something to eat.” Say “go to bed earlier than usual,” and add one more practical action, such as taking a short break or drinking water.

例: When I feel tired, I usually have something to eat and go to bed earlier than usual. If I still have work to do, I take a short break and drink some water. I try to get enough rest so that I can concentrate better the next day.

提案: Answer directly and use natural expressions. “It retards my power” should be replaced with “It helps me recharge” or “It gives me more energy,” while “I’m not going too far placed” should be replaced with “I don’t go anywhere too far.” Connect the contrasting ideas clearly with “although” or “however,” and give a specific example of a nearby activity.

例: Yes, I sometimes go out with my friends because talking to them helps me relax and recharge. However, I avoid going anywhere too far when I’m exhausted, as travelling can make me even more tired. We usually meet at a nearby café or visit someone’s home.

× I sometimes fell asleep after just arriving home.

✓ I sometimes fall asleep after just arriving home.

The question asks about a usual or repeated experience, so the present tense is required. Use fall, not the past-tense form fell.

× I sometimes fall asleep after just alive at home.

✓ I sometimes fall asleep after just arriving home.

After the preposition after, use a gerund or -ing form. The verb arrive becomes arriving. Alive is an adjective and cannot be used as the verb in this structure.

× I sometimes I sometimes fell asleep after just arriving home.

✓ I sometimes fall asleep after just arriving home.

The subject and adverb phrase are unnecessarily repeated. Use the subject I only once to form a clear sentence.

× I am working as a researcher so I after I read many English articles, I feel so exhausted because it is so beautiful.

✓ I work as a researcher, so after I read many English articles, I feel very exhausted.

The phrase I after I read is incorrectly organized. Place the time clause after the conjunction so: so after I read many English articles. The final phrase about something being beautiful is unclear and does not logically explain feeling exhausted, so it is best omitted or replaced with a relevant reason.

× I try to eat with much amount of food.

✓ I try to eat a large amount of food.

Much cannot normally be used before amount in this way. Use a large amount of food or eat more food. Food is an uncountable noun, so amount is appropriate.

× I try to go to bed earlier than every day.

✓ I try to go to bed earlier than usual.

Every day is a time expression, not a suitable comparison object in this sentence. Use than usual to compare your current bedtime with your normal bedtime.

× I do everything to.

✓ I do everything I can to recover.

The infinitive marker to must be followed by a base verb. The original sentence ends before the required verb is provided, so the sentence is incomplete.

× Yes, I often do and it retards my power by communicating with my friends but I am not going too far placed because it makes me much more tired.

✓ Yes, I often do, and communicating with my friends restores my energy, but I do not go too far because it makes me much more tired.

The original sentence contains several awkwardly connected clauses. Use commas before coordinating conjunctions such as and and but, and use the clearer structure communicating with my friends restores my energy. The phrase going too far placed is not grammatically natural; go too far is the correct expression.