Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答的核心意思比较清楚：学习后经常感到疲倦。但“after I've studied finished”语法错误，应说“after I finish studying”；“make lots of homework”应改为“have/do a lot of homework”；“my calculate”应改为“calculus”。此外，重复使用“just like”，并且答案没有完整结束。建议先直接回答，再说明课程作业多这一原因，控制在3—4句内。

例: Yes, I often feel tired after studying, especially on school days. I have a lot of homework for subjects like calculus and business, so I usually feel exhausted by the end of the day. However, I normally feel better after taking a short break.

提案: 答案没有清楚回答“什么时候感到疲倦”，开头的“in the west on the We weekend”难以理解。句子结构不完整，例如“Sometimes it will I will have”需要重组。建议使用明确的时间表达，如“at the end of the week”“after a full day of classes”，并用because补充原因；不要列出无法完成的片段。

例: I usually feel tired at the end of the week, especially on Friday evenings. I have classes and club activities almost every day, and I sometimes need to study subjects like calculus and Chinese as well. By the weekend, I really need some time to relax.

提案: 答案结构较完整，也提供了具体活动和原因，回答比较有效。需要改进的是“find some sport to play it”应改为“play a sport”或“do some exercise”，“release our strength”用词不自然，应说“relieve stress”或“recharge my energy”。另外，篮球和滑雪同时出现略显不够自然，可以选择一个更常见的活动，并减少重复表达。

例: When I feel tired, I usually do some exercise, such as playing basketball. It helps me relieve stress and clear my mind after a long day of studying. After that, I normally feel more energetic and can concentrate better.

提案: 答案有明确立场，也给出了和朋友骑自行车、打篮球的例子，但开头“here's why the main reason is”重复；“we will play lots of activities”应改为“we do different activities”；“in the night, in the evening”重复且不自然。最后一句没有完成，建议清楚说明外出如何帮助你放松，并用2—4句完整回答。

例: Yes, I still go out with my friends when I feel tired, as long as I am not completely exhausted. We might go cycling or play basketball in the evening, which helps me take my mind off schoolwork. Spending time with them usually makes me feel relaxed and happier.

× Yeah, honestly I always feel tired after I've studied finished.

✓ Yeah, honestly, I always feel tired after I've finished studying.

“finish”后面通常接动名词（-ing形式），不能说“finish studied”。正确结构是“finish studying”。同时，“I've finished”表示已经完成学习，符合语境。

× All of those subject has lots of homework.

✓ All of those subjects have lots of homework.

“those”后面要接复数名词，所以“subject”应改为“subjects”。建议注意指示词与名词的单复数搭配：this subject，但those subjects。

× All of those subject has lots of homework.

✓ All of those subjects have lots of homework.

主语“subjects”是复数，因此谓语动词应使用“have”，不能使用单数形式“has”。记住：复数主语通常搭配have，第三人称单数主语才搭配has。

× And in the west on the We weekend because I often have lots of classes and clubs that I need to do every day.

✓ I feel tired on the weekend because I often have lots of classes and clubs that I need to attend every day.

表示“在周末”应使用介词短语“on the weekend”，而不是“in the weekend”。表示参加课程或俱乐部时，使用“attend”比“do”更准确。

× And in the west on the We weekend because I often have lots of classes and clubs that I need to do every day.

✓ I feel tired on the weekend because I often have lots of classes and clubs that I need to attend every day.

原句以“And”开头，并且以“because”引导原因，却没有完整的主句，句子结构不完整。可以补充主语和谓语，组成完整句子：“I feel tired ... because ...”。

× Sometimes it will I will have the Chinese

✓ Sometimes I will have Chinese classes.

“will”后面应直接接动词原形，不能出现“will I will”这样的重复结构。正确语序是“I will have”。另外，“Chinese classes”表达“中文课”更完整。

× Honestly, when I feel tired, I will find some sport to play it.

✓ Honestly, when I feel tired, I find a sport to play.

问题询问的是平时的习惯，因此应使用一般现在时“find”，而不是“will find”。一般现在时常用于描述习惯、规律或经常发生的事情。

× Honestly, when I feel tired, I will find some sport to play it.

✓ Honestly, when I feel tired, I find a sport to play.

“play”后面已经有“a sport”作为宾语，不需要再加代词“it”。“a sport to play”中的“to play”已经说明要进行的动作，因此删去多余的“it”。

× I think when I go out with my friends and we will play lots of activities just like sometimes and in the night, in the evening, we might go cycling and playing basketball with them.

✓ I think that when I go out with my friends, we play lots of activities. Sometimes, in the evening, we might go cycling and play basketball with them.

这里描述的是经常发生的活动，主句中的“we will play”应改为一般现在时“we play”。一般现在时适合描述日常习惯，而不是将来时。

× I think when I go out with my friends and we will play lots of activities just like sometimes and in the night, in the evening, we might go cycling and playing basketball with them.

✓ I think that when I go out with my friends, we play lots of activities. Sometimes, in the evening, we might go cycling and play basketball with them.

表示“在晚上”通常使用“at night”或“in the evening”。原句中的“in the night”不符合这里的常用表达。建议区分：at night表示夜间，in the evening表示傍晚或晚上。

× We might go cycling and playing basketball with them.

✓ We might go cycling and play basketball with them.

情态动词“might”后面的动词必须使用原形。因为“go”与“play”共同受“might”控制，所以应说“might go ... and play ...”，不能说“might ... playing”。

× So things I feel is

✓ So, I feel that ...

原句的结构不完整，缺少清晰的主语、谓语和完整意思。可以使用“So, I feel that ...”引出自己的感受，后面再补充完整内容。

× So things I feel is

✓ So, the thing I feel is ...

如果想表达“我认为的事情是……”，主语应为单数“the thing”，因此谓语使用“is”。如果想表达多个事情，则应说“the things ... are”。不过在这个语境中，直接说“So, I feel that ...”会更加自然。