Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and use natural grammar. Replace “study a lot of much time” with “study for a long time” and keep the verb tense consistent by saying “clean the house.” You could also add a specific reason or result to make the answer more effective.

例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I study for a long time or clean the house. After doing these activities, I usually need to take a short break and relax.

提案: Use the correct expression “I usually feel tired” instead of “I usually filter.” Also, “data” is generally uncountable, so say “a lot of data,” although “historical information” is more natural in this context. Give a clear reason and connect it with “because.”

例: I usually feel tired when I study, especially when I study history. This is because there is a lot of information and many dates to remember, so I have to concentrate for a long time.

提案: Start with a direct answer instead of repeating “I feel tired.” Use the present tense consistently: “When I feel tired, I usually…” Also, “read a lot of books” may require too much effort when you are tired; explain whether reading helps you relax or whether you prefer another activity.

例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short rest. If I still have some energy, I read a few pages of a book because reading helps me relax.

提案: Give a clear yes-or-no answer and use the natural phrase “go out with my friends” instead of “call out with my friends.” Replace “communicate with different topics and problems” with “talk about different topics and share our problems.” You could also mention that you sometimes choose a less tiring activity.

例: Yes, I sometimes still go out with my friends when I feel tired because talking to them helps me relax. However, instead of going somewhere busy, we usually have a quiet meal or chat at a café.

× Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I study a lot of much time and when I cleaned the house,

✓ Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I study for a long time and when I cleaned the house.

A lot of much time is an incorrect combination of quantifiers. Use for a long time to express the duration of studying. The expression a lot of time is also possible, but it does not normally follow study directly in this sentence.

× Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I study a lot of much time and when I cleaned the house,

✓ Yes, I often feel tired, especially when I study for a long time and when I clean the house.

The question asks about a usual or repeated situation, so use the present simple. Clean should be used instead of cleaned because the student is describing a regular activity.

× I usually filter when I study and especially when I study history, maybe because it has a lot of datas and stories.

✓ I usually filter when I study and especially when I study history, maybe because it has a lot of data and stories.

Data is generally treated as an uncountable noun when referring to information, so it should not be written as datas in this sentence. Use a lot of data.

× I feel tired when I when I was tired I get some rest or read a lot of books.

✓ When I feel tired, I get some rest or read a lot of books.

The original sentence repeats when I and combines two incomplete structures. Use one clear conditional time clause followed by the main clause: When I feel tired, I get some rest or read a lot of books.

× I feel tired when I when I was tired I get some rest or read a lot of books.

✓ When I feel tired, I get some rest or read a lot of books.

The answer describes a regular present situation, so was is not appropriate. Use the present simple feel and get to maintain the correct tense.

× When I feel tired, I still call out with my friends because it helps me to relax and we communicate with different topics and problems.

✓ When I feel tired, I still call out with my friends because it helps me to relax and we communicate about different topics and problems.

Use communicate about when describing the subjects or issues that people discuss. Communicate with is used for the people you communicate with, while communicate about introduces the topic.