Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then give one clear reason and result. Correct the grammar in “I always meeting” to “I am always meeting” or, more naturally, “I meet people all day.” Use “at the end of a long day” instead of “after a long day work.” Avoid repeating “with them” and keep the answer to two or three well-connected sentences.

例: Yes, I often feel tired because I meet patients and assess their conditions throughout the day. By the end of a long shift, I usually feel mentally and physically exhausted.

提案: Give a complete answer and avoid repeating “per day” and “So.” The phrase “two analysis” should be “two assessments,” and “discuss their case conditions” would be more natural as “discuss their conditions.” Complete the unfinished sentence and explain why the appointments make you tired, using a clear linking word such as “because” or “as a result.”

例: I usually feel tired after work, especially on days when I have several appointments. I may need to assess two or three clients and discuss their conditions in detail, so I use a lot of mental energy.

提案: The answer is relevant and includes two specific ways to relax, but it would sound more natural with “relax” rather than “relax myself,” and “get an aromatherapy massage” rather than “get some aromatherapy massage.” Use a clearer contrast or alternative structure, such as “Either I..., or I....” Also avoid repeating “relax” in the same sentence.

例: After work, I usually unwind in one of two ways. I either have a drink at a quiet pub or get an aromatherapy massage, depending on how exhausted I feel.

提案: You give a clear answer and support it with reasons and activities, but correct “even I'm tired” to “even when I’m tired,” “feel recharge” to “feel recharged,” and “my friend” to “my friends” when speaking generally. Break the long sentence into two or three sentences and avoid repeating “friends” and “chat.” Use “perspectives” instead of “different kinds of opinions” for a more natural expression.

例: Yes, I still go out with my friends even when I’m tired. Talking to them helps me feel recharged because they offer different perspectives and make me laugh. We often have dinner together and catch up on our day.

× Yes, I often feel tired because I am an occupational therapist and I always meeting with other people and need to analyze their condition with them and so I am very tired after a long day work.

✓ Yes, I often feel tired because I am an occupational therapist, and I always meet with other people and need to analyze their conditions with them. Therefore, I am very tired after a long day at work.

After the adverb always, use the base form of the verb to describe a regular activity: always meet, not always meeting. Also, conditions is plural because the therapist analyzes more than one aspect of a client's condition. The phrase after a long day at work requires the preposition at.

× So I have two analysis and discuss their case conditions with my clients.

✓ So I have two analyses and discuss their case conditions with my clients.

The plural form of analysis is analyses, not analysis. The word analysis has an irregular plural form.

× So I have to use up all

✓ So I have to use up all my energy.

The phrase use up all is incomplete because all needs a noun or pronoun after it in this context. Adding my energy makes the sentence complete and clear.

× After work I always go to a pub to have a drink to help me relax myself or I go to a massage shop to get some aromatherapy massage so that this can relax me a lot.

✓ After work, I always go to a pub to have a drink to help me relax, or I go to a massage shop to get an aromatherapy massage so that I can relax a lot.

After help me, use the base verb relax without the reflexive pronoun myself. The verb relax does not require a reflexive pronoun in this sentence.

× Sure, I will go out with my friend even I'm tired because I love chatting with my friends and also they can give me different kinds of opinions so that I will feel recharge after meeting up with my friend and we can have a nice dinner together and chat about our daily life.

✓ Sure, I go out with my friends even when I am tired because I love chatting with them. They can also give me different opinions, which makes me feel recharged after we meet up. We can have a nice dinner together and chat about our daily lives.

Use even when or even though before a complete clause: even when I am tired. Even cannot directly introduce the clause in the original sentence. The relative clause which makes me feel recharged connects the idea more clearly than so that in this context.

× Sure, I will go out with my friend even I'm tired because I love chatting with my friends and also they can give me different kinds of opinions so that I will feel recharge after meeting up with my friend and we can have a nice dinner together and chat about our daily life.

✓ Sure, I go out with my friends even when I am tired because I love chatting with them. They can also give me different opinions, which makes me feel recharged after we meet up. We can have a nice dinner together and chat about our daily lives.

The question asks about a regular or habitual action: When you feel tired, do you still go out? Therefore, use the present simple I go rather than the future form I will go.

× Sure, I will go out with my friend even I'm tired because I love chatting with my friends and also they can give me different kinds of opinions so that I will feel recharge after meeting up with my friend and we can have a nice dinner together and chat about our daily life.

✓ Sure, I go out with my friends even when I am tired because I love chatting with them. They can also give me different opinions, which makes me feel recharged after we meet up. We can have a nice dinner together and chat about our daily lives.

After the linking verb feel, use the past participle recharged as an adjective to describe your emotional state. Recharge is the base form and cannot be used after feel in this sentence.