Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 「Yes, I sometimes feel tired」という直接的な答えはよいですが、文が “So after that” で終わっており、理由の説明が不完全です。また、“go to play volleyball” より “play volleyball” のほうが自然です。運動後にどのように疲れるのかを、1〜2文で具体的に説明し、because や so を正しく使いましょう。

例: Yes, I sometimes feel tired, especially after playing volleyball at the gym. It is quite physically demanding, so I usually need to rest afterward.

提案: 答えの内容が繰り返されており、“go back to go back to home” や “from outside” などの表現が不自然です。“I feel tired when I get home after being outside” のように、時と状況を簡潔に述べましょう。“my aerial” は意味が伝わらないため、屋外で疲れる理由を “the heat” や “the noise” など具体的な語で説明してください。

例: I usually feel exhausted when I get home after spending a long time outside. I get especially tired on hot days because the heat makes me feel uncomfortable.

提案: “I usually go to bed” という答えは質問に直接答えていますが、“Ardi Arrio” と “at at” は不要な繰り返しです。また、“because to go to bed is the best way” は不自然なので、“because sleeping is the best way to recover” のように表現しましょう。疲れたときの行動を一つ加えると、より具体的で自然な回答になります。

例: When I feel tired, I usually go to bed at around 10 p.m. I sometimes take a warm shower first because it helps me relax and recover.

提案: “No” と答えた後の理由を明確にしましょう。“prefer to watch the movie than that” ではなく、“I prefer watching a movie at home to going out” が自然です。また、“I must be active person at home” は意味が矛盾しているため、“I need to be sociable and active when I meet my friends” のように修正できます。疲れているときは休みたいという結果まで述べると、回答の流れがよくなります。

例: No, I prefer watching a movie at home to going out with my friends. When I am tired, I do not have enough energy to socialize, so I would rather relax on the sofa.

× Yes, I sometimes feel tired because I often go to play volleyball at the gym. So after that

✓ Yes, I sometimes feel tired because I often go to play volleyball at the gym, so I feel tired afterward.

The phrase So after that is incomplete because it does not contain a subject and a verb. Join it to the previous clause and add the verb feel to form a complete sentence.

× I also feel exhausted when I go back to go back to home go back home for from outside because I don't like outside because my aerial

✓ I also feel exhausted when I go back home after being outside because I do not like being outside.

The sentence contains repeated phrases and several incomplete or incorrectly connected clauses. Use one clear structure: go back home after being outside. The unexplained phrase my aerial has been omitted because it does not form a meaningful grammatical clause.

× I also feel exhausted when I go back to go back to home go back home for from outside because I don't like outside because my aerial

✓ I also feel exhausted when I go back home after being outside because I do not like being outside.

After being outside is the appropriate expression for describing the time or situation before returning home. The prepositions to, for, and from were used incorrectly and repeatedly.

× I usually go to bed Ardi Arrio at at ten PM because to go to bed is the best way

✓ I usually go to bed at ten p.m. because going to bed is the best way to rest.

Use at once before a specific clock time. The repeated phrase at at is incorrect. The unrelated words Ardi Arrio have been omitted as speech disfluencies.

× I usually go to bed Ardi Arrio at at ten PM because to go to bed is the best way

✓ I usually go to bed at ten p.m. because going to bed is the best way to rest.

When a verb phrase functions as the subject of a clause, the -ing form is more appropriate here. Going to bed is the subject of the clause.

× No, I prefer to watch the movie than that because when I meet with my friends, I must be active person at home.

✓ No, I prefer to watch a movie to going out because when I meet my friends, I have to be active.

The standard comparative pattern is prefer A to B, not prefer A than B. The answer should contrast watching a movie with going out, which is the activity mentioned in the question.

× No, I prefer to watch the movie than that because when I meet with my friends, I must be active person at home.

✓ No, I prefer to watch a movie to going out because when I meet my friends, I have to be active.

Use the indefinite article a before the singular countable noun movie when referring to any movie. In the original phrase active person, an article would also be required, but the corrected sentence uses the more natural expression be active.