Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接表达了“每天都累”，但语法和表达不够自然，例如“a very busy work”应改为“a very busy job”，“gather early”应改为“get up early”，“cannot help to stay up late”可以改为“have to stay up late”。不要使用不完整的结尾“due to the video work and also”。建议按照“观点＋原因＋结果”的结构组织，最多使用3句话，并加入具体工作细节。

例: Yes, I feel tired almost every day. I have a demanding job, so I often have to stay up late and get up early the next morning. As a result, I usually feel exhausted during the day.

提案: 回答包含时间、原因和结果，结构基本清楚，但“during the working hours”不如“during working hours”自然；“stay late”应明确为“stay up late”或“work late”；“I feel I just I just feel lost”有明显重复和犹豫。建议使用“especially”突出最疲惫的时间，并用一个具体表现说明无法集中注意力。

例: I usually feel tired during working hours, especially when I start work in the morning. Since I often work late and get up early, it is difficult for me to concentrate on my tasks. I also feel worn out again after work.

提案: 回答给出了明确方法，也解释了短暂休息的作用，但“I think”重复，句子之间缺少清晰连接，最后一句“after short”是不完整表达。可以改为“after a short break”，并说明休息时具体做什么，例如喝水、伸展或离开屏幕。建议避免“from my own perspective”这类在简单问题中略显冗长的开头。

例: I usually take a short break of about five minutes. I might drink some water, stretch my legs, or simply look away from my computer screen. This helps me refresh my mind and concentrate better afterward.

提案: 回答立场明确，并使用了“it depends”进行限定，但“take enough break”应改为“get enough rest”，“the first thing I will do is to sleep and is to take...”结构重复；“which help me”应改为“which helps me”或直接说“and it makes me feel more energetic”。建议使用“if...but if...”进行对比，并明确说明疲劳程度如何影响你的决定。

例: It depends on how tired I am and how much free time I have. If I am completely exhausted, I would stay home and get some rest first. However, if I only feel a little tired, I might still meet my friends because socializing helps me feel more energetic.

× I have a very busy work.

✓ I have a very busy job.

“Work”通常是不可数名词，不能直接与“a”连用。这里指一份工作或职业，应使用可数名词“job”，所以说“a busy job”。

× I cannot help to stay up late every night.

✓ I cannot help staying up late every night.

固定搭配“cannot help”后面要接动名词（-ing形式），不能接“to do”。因此应使用“staying”。

× Then in the next morning I have to gather early.

✓ Then the next morning I have to get up early.

表示“第二天早上”时，通常直接说“the next morning”，不需要介词“in”。另外，“gather”不表示“起床”；此处应使用短语“get up”。

× Because I have a very busy work and after my work I cannot help to stay up late every night and then in the next morning I have to gather early.

✓ I feel tired every day because I have a very busy job. After work, I cannot help staying up late every night, so I have to get up early the next morning.

原句以“Because”开头，但后面的内容结构很长且连接混乱。应将原因和结果拆分成清晰的句子，并使用“so”连接结果。

× I think a short break for around five minutes will suffice it will help me to refresh and to be more concentrated.

✓ I think a short break of around five minutes will suffice. It will help me refresh and concentrate better.

原句包含两个完整句子，却没有使用句号、分号或连接词，形成连句错误。应将其拆成两个句子。

× I feel better after short.

✓ I feel better after a short break.

“short”是形容词，不能单独作“休息”的名词。需要补充名词“break”；因为这里指一次短暂的休息，所以使用“a short break”。

× I will go out with my friends which help me to be more excited.

✓ I will go out with my friends, which helps me feel more excited.

关系代词“which”指代前面的整个情况或行为，视为单数，因此后面的动词应使用“helps”，而不是“help”。

× The first thing I will do is to sleep and is to take enough break.

✓ The first things I will do are sleep and take a sufficient break.

句中列出了两个行为：“sleep”和“take a break”，所以主语“the first things”应使用复数，动词使用“are”。同时，两个动词应保持平行结构，使用“sleep and take”。

× I will take enough break.

✓ I will take a sufficient break.

“Break”在这里表示“一段休息时间”，是可数名词单数，需要冠词“a”。“enough break”搭配不自然，可以改为“a sufficient break”或“enough time to rest”。

× After work, I also feel very tired.

✓ After work, I also feel very tired.

此句语法正确。“work”表示日常工作这一概念时通常不加冠词，因此不需要修改。