Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，也给出了原因，但“a heavy schedule on study and work”不自然，应改为“a busy schedule with studying and working”；“after do”应改为“after doing”。此外，“I will feel tired”在描述日常情况时最好使用一般现在时“I feel tired”。建议用“观点+原因+具体结果”的结构，避免信息重复。

例: Yes, quite often. I have a busy schedule with studying and working, so I usually feel tired after completing several tasks. I try to get enough sleep so that I can stay productive.

提案: 回答中出现了疑问句倒装错误，应该直接说“When I study or work for a long time”；“I feel you”不符合语境，可能想表达“I feel exhausted”；“exhausted to some tasks”应改为“exhausted after doing certain tasks”。建议先明确回答时间，再补充原因或应对方式，并使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: I usually feel tired when I study or work for several hours without a break. In particular, tasks that require a lot of concentration can be exhausting, so I normally adjust my schedule and take short breaks.

提案: 回答内容切题，提供了短暂休息、听音乐和午睡等具体做法，结构也比较清楚。但存在明显的重复和自我纠正，影响流利度；“which had helped me”应改为“which helps me”，因为是在描述通常有效的方法。“choose to have a short break”可以更自然地说成“take a short break”。

例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short break and listen to some relaxing music. If I am extremely exhausted, I take a short nap, which helps me recharge and concentrate better afterwards.

提案: 回答有“视情况而定”的基本观点，但条件句中的时态和冠词需要改进：“if I don't have an appointment”或更自然地说“if I haven't made plans”；“if I did”指代不清，应明确说“if I already have plans”；“give a good prayer/conduction”不符合语境，应该表达为“keep the plans”或“be a good friend”。建议清楚说明两种情况，并避免重复“with my friend”。

例: It depends on whether I have already made plans. If I am too tired and have no arrangements, I usually stay home and rest. However, if I have promised to meet my friends, I will still go out, although I may suggest having a relaxing evening.

× To be honest, yes, quite often because recently I have a relatively heavy schedule on study and work and I will feel tired after do some work tasks.

✓ To be honest, yes, quite often, because recently I have a relatively heavy schedule for studying and working, and I often feel tired after doing some work tasks.

“schedule on”搭配不正确，应使用“schedule for”。表示“做某事之后”时，介词“after”后面接动名词，因此应使用“after doing”，不能使用“after do”。此外，这个问题询问的是经常性的情况，所以使用一般现在时“feel”比“will feel”更合适。

× To be honest, yes, quite often because recently I have a relatively heavy schedule on study and work and I will feel tired after do some work tasks.

✓ To be honest, yes, quite often, because recently I have a relatively heavy schedule for studying and working, and I often feel tired after doing some work tasks.

“after”在这里是介词，后面需要接动名词形式，所以“after do”应改为“after doing”。建议记住：after、before、without等介词后面通常接名词或动名词。

× To be honest, yes, quite often because recently I have a relatively heavy schedule on study and work and I will feel tired after do some work tasks.

✓ To be honest, yes, quite often, because recently I have a relatively heavy schedule for studying and working, and I often feel tired after doing some work tasks.

这里描述的是通常或经常发生的情况，而不是将来某一次发生的事情，因此应使用一般现在时“feel”，而不是一般将来时“will feel”。

× Will I feel tired after long time studying or working? And I feel you, I'm very exhausted to some tasks for hours and I need to adjust my schedule.

✓ I feel tired after studying or working for a long time. I feel very exhausted after doing some tasks for hours, so I need to adjust my schedule.

原句把回答写成了疑问句“Will I feel...”，与问题的回答结构不匹配。应直接使用陈述句“I feel tired...”。“I feel you”在这里不能表达“我感到很累”，句子结构和表达对象不正确，因此改为“I feel very exhausted”。

× Will I feel tired after long time studying or working? And I feel you, I'm very exhausted to some tasks for hours and I need to adjust my schedule.

✓ I feel tired after studying or working for a long time. I feel very exhausted after doing some tasks for hours, so I need to adjust my schedule.

表示持续一段时间时，应使用“for + 一段时间”，所以“for a long time”比“after long time”正确。表示因做某事而感到疲惫时，可以使用“exhausted after doing something”，而不是“exhausted to something”。

× Will I feel tired after long time studying or working? And I feel you, I'm very exhausted to some tasks for hours and I need to adjust my schedule.

✓ I feel tired after studying or working for a long time. I feel very exhausted after doing some tasks for hours, so I need to adjust my schedule.

“long time”是可数名词短语，单数形式前需要冠词，因此应说“a long time”。更自然的结构是“for a long time”。

× When I feel tired, uh, I choose to have a short break and uh, I often listen to some light music. Uh, if I feel extremely exhausted, I will choose to take a nap and, uh, which had helped me, which helps me, helps me to recharge myself.

✓ When I feel tired, I choose to take a short break and often listen to some light music. If I feel extremely exhausted, I take a nap, which helps me recharge.

原句中“and which had helped me, which helps me, helps me”重复且结构不完整。“which”引导的定语从句应有清晰的先行词和完整结构，因此改为“which helps me recharge”。描述通常有效的习惯时，应使用一般现在时“helps”，而不是过去完成时“had helped”。

× When I feel tired, uh, I choose to have a short break and uh, I often listen to some light music. Uh, if I feel extremely exhausted, I will choose to take a nap and, uh, which had helped me, which helps me, helps me to recharge myself.

✓ When I feel tired, I choose to take a short break and often listen to some light music. If I feel extremely exhausted, I take a nap, which helps me recharge.

“had helped”是过去完成时，通常用于表示过去某个时间点之前已经完成的动作。这里描述的是午睡通常能帮助自己恢复精力，应使用一般现在时“helps”。

× This depends, you know, if I didn't have appointment with my friend, I will not go out with my friend. But if I did, I will uh, try my best to, uh, give a good prayer, give a good, umm, conduction for my friends, you know?

✓ It depends. If I don't have an appointment with my friend, I won't go out with my friend. But if I do, I will try my best to give a good prayer and provide good guidance for my friends.

“appointment”是单数可数名词，前面需要不定冠词，因此应说“an appointment”。当名词以元音音素开头时使用“an”，如“an appointment”。

× This depends, you know, if I didn't have appointment with my friend, I will not go out with my friend. But if I did, I will uh, try my best to, uh, give a good prayer, give a good, umm, conduction for my friends, you know?

✓ It depends. If I don't have an appointment with my friend, I won't go out with my friend. But if I do, I will try my best to give a good prayer and provide good guidance for my friends.

这是第一类条件句，if从句通常使用一般现在时，因此“didn't have”应改为“don't have”，“if I did”应改为“if I do”。主句可以使用“will”。

× This depends, you know, if I didn't have appointment with my friend, I will not go out with my friend. But if I did, I will uh, try my best to, uh, give a good prayer, give a good, umm, conduction for my friends, you know?

✓ It depends. If I don't have an appointment with my friend, I won't go out with my friend. But if I do, I will try my best to give a good prayer and provide good guidance for my friends.

第一类条件句的主句可以使用“will/won't + 动词原形”。因此“will not go”可缩写为“won't go”。同时，if从句中的现在时和主句中的将来时需要保持正确搭配。