Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly with a natural sentence and use a linking word to show contrast. The phrase “Yes, often I feel tired” is understandable, but “I often feel tired” is more natural. Also, “especially training” should be expressed as “especially when I work out” or “especially because I exercise regularly.” Add one specific reason or result to make the answer more developed.

例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a busy day or a hard workout. However, I’m generally quite active because I enjoy exercising and doing different activities. I usually feel more energetic after I take a short break.

提案: Avoid repetition such as “I feel I feel tired,” and express the time more naturally. The phrase “while I’m in bed” suggests that you become tired after going to bed; “at the end of the day” is clearer. Give a specific reason, such as working, studying, or exercising, and connect the ideas with “because” or “so.”

例: I usually feel tired at the end of the day, especially after working or exercising. By the time I go to bed, I have very little energy left, so I just want to relax and fall asleep.

提案: Give a clear list of activities using parallel grammar. “Sit at bed” should be “sit on my bed,” and avoid fillers and repetition such as “yeah” and “watch, watch.” The final phrase “have an up” is unclear; if you mean a nap, say “take a nap.” Use linking words such as “usually,” “sometimes,” and “if” to make the answer more coherent.

例: When I feel tired, I usually sit on my bed and rest for a while. I might watch videos on my phone or call a friend to chat. If I’m extremely tired, I simply take a short nap.

提案: Answer the yes/no question more directly and avoid repeating “tired” and “friends.” The sentence needs clearer grammar: “I enjoy having their company” is more natural than “I like having company around me,” and “they are usually fun to be with” is clearer than “the or usually fun to sit with.” Add a specific example or condition, such as going somewhere relaxing when you are only mildly tired.

例: Yes, sometimes I still go out with my friends, especially when I’m only a little tired. I enjoy their company, and spending time with them often helps me relax and feel better. However, if I’m completely exhausted, I prefer to stay home and sleep.

× Yes often I feel tired but mostly I'm a very active person I like doing a lot of things especially training

✓ Yes, I often feel tired, but I'm mostly a very active person. I like doing a lot of things, especially training.

The adverb often should normally come before the main verb feel, so I often feel tired is the correct word order. The adverb mostly is more natural before the adjective phrase a very active person. Separating the ideas into two sentences also makes the response clearer.

× I sit at bed, take a rest, yeah, watch, watch, TikTok on my phone, call my friends, have fun with them on a call or sleep or have an up

✓ I sit in bed, take a rest, watch TikTok on my phone, call my friends, have fun with them on a call, sleep, or take a nap.

The correct preposition is in when referring to being inside or on a bed: sit in bed. The phrase have an up is not grammatically correct in this context. Take a nap is the appropriate expression for sleeping for a short time. The repeated words were removed to make the sentence clearer.

× I sit at bed, take a rest, yeah, watch, watch, TikTok on my phone, call my friends, have fun with them on a call or sleep or have an up

✓ I sit in bed, take a rest, watch TikTok on my phone, call my friends, have fun with them on a call, sleep, or take a nap.

The original answer contains a long, loosely connected list with repeated words and an incomplete final expression. Use parallel verb forms in the list: sit, take, watch, call, have, sleep, and take. This creates a clearer and more grammatically complete sentence.

× Yeah, sometimes when I feel exhausted or tired I go out with my friends because I like having company around me and my friends I love them and the or usually fun to sit with

✓ Yeah, sometimes, when I feel exhausted or tired, I go out with my friends because I like having company around me. I love my friends, and they're usually fun to sit with.

The original answer combines several independent ideas without clear sentence boundaries, and the phrase the or usually is incomplete. Dividing the response into two sentences makes the ideas easier to follow. They're is the contraction of they are and correctly introduces the description of the friends.