Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Yanıtınız soruya doğrudan cevap veriyor ve neden belirtiyor; bu nedenle temel yapı başarılı. Ancak “I go to work and I wake up early” ifadesi biraz basit kalıyor. Cevabı daha doğal ve etkili yapmak için hafta içi yoğun programınız veya yorgunluğunuzun günlük hayatınıza etkisi hakkında bir özgül detay ekleyebilirsiniz. Beş cümleyi geçmeden “especially” veya “as a result” gibi bağlayıcılar kullanın.

例: Yes, I often feel tired on weekdays because I have to wake up early and work all day. As a result, I usually have very little energy in the evening, especially after a busy day at work.

提案: Yanıtınız belirli bir zaman ve neden sunuyor; ancak zaman uyumu ve kelime seçiminde birçok hata var. “When I came to home” yerine “When I come home”, “I worked all of week” yerine “I have worked all week” veya “I have been working all week”, “My energy is finished” yerine “I have no energy left” ve “until a Saturday” yerine “until Saturday” kullanmalısınız. Cevabı daha doğal hale getirmek için önce doğrudan zamanı söyleyin, ardından nedenini ve sonucunu bağlayıcılarla açıklayın.

例: I usually feel tired when I come home from work, especially on Fridays. I have been working all week, so I have very little energy left. Consequently, I go to bed early and often sleep until Saturday morning.

提案: Yanıtınız kısa ve soruya cevap veriyor; ancak “go sleep” yerine “go to sleep” ve “take a rest” yerine daha doğal olan “get some rest” kullanılmalı. “I do not eat” ifadesi anlam açısından beklenmedik ve açıklamasız; gerçekten yemek yemiyorsanız bunun nedenini belirtin, aksi halde “I have a light meal” gibi daha doğal bir ifade kullanın. İki eylemi virgülle birleştirmek yerine “or” ve “because” gibi bağlaçlarla daha akıcı bir yapı kurun.

例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap or get some rest at home. I also have a light meal because I do not feel like cooking anything complicated.

提案: Ana fikriniz anlaşılabiliyor, ancak tekrarlar ve yanlış ifadeler akıcılığı ciddi şekilde azaltıyor. “when I when I am tired” tekrarını kaldırın; “when I have tired” yerine “when I am tired”, “I want to only sleep” yerine “I just want to sleep” ve “I am buried” yerine “I feel exhausted” veya “I will be too tired to enjoy myself” kullanın. Cevabı doğrudan “No, I usually don’t...” şeklinde başlatıp neden ve sonucu “because” ve “so” ile açıklayın.

例: No, I usually do not go out with my friends when I am tired because I just want to sleep and recover. If I go out, I feel exhausted and cannot enjoy the evening, so I prefer to stay at home.

× When I came to home from work

✓ When I come home from work

The answer describes a usual or repeated situation, so the present tense is required. Use come instead of came.

× When I came to home from work

✓ When I come home from work

The word home does not usually take the preposition to when it follows a movement verb such as come or go.

× especially on Friday

✓ especially on Fridays

The student is talking about a repeated situation, so the plural form Fridays is more appropriate.

× because I worked all of week

✓ because I work all week

This describes the student's regular weekly routine, so the present tense work is needed instead of the past tense worked.

× because I worked all of week

✓ because I work all week

No article is needed before week in the expression all week. The phrase all of week is incorrect.

× I sleep until a Saturday

✓ I sleep until Saturday

When referring to Saturday in a general weekly routine, do not use the indefinite article a.

× I usually go sleep

✓ I usually go to sleep

The fixed expression is go to sleep, so the preposition to is required.

× I usually go sleep or take a rest, I do not eat.

✓ I usually go to sleep or take a rest, and I do not eat.

Two independent clauses should not be joined only with a comma. Use the conjunction and to connect them correctly.

× I don't usually go out with my friends when I when I am tired because when I have tired I want to only sleep if I go out I am buried.

✓ I do not usually go out with my friends when I am tired because, when I am tired, I only want to sleep. If I go out, I feel exhausted.

The original sentence contains a repeated clause, several incorrectly connected clauses, and missing punctuation. Divide the ideas into separate sentences and use commas after introductory if-clauses.

× when I have tired

✓ when I am tired

Tired is an adjective, so it must be used with the verb be. The correct form is am tired, not have tired.

× I want to only sleep

✓ I only want to sleep

The adverb only is more naturally placed before the main verb want when it limits the student's desire.