Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本切题，但开头的“sometimes I do some homework”不能准确表达“经常感到疲惫”的原因，而且“I always”重复使用，句子“I always think why should I need do...”语法不自然。建议先直接回答频率，再说明原因；使用“because”连接细节，并将疑问句改为陈述句。避免重复表达“tired”，可以使用“mentally exhausted”或“under pressure”等更自然的词汇。

例: Yes, I sometimes feel tired, especially when I have a heavy workload. I often wonder why I have to do so much homework, and this can make me feel mentally exhausted.

提案: 回答切题，也提到了作业多、难度大以及焦虑等具体原因。不过，“the homework... difficult to solve them”存在代词和搭配错误；“when I have...”重复出现，影响流畅性。建议用一个清晰的条件句直接回答，并通过“especially when”补充具体情况，例如考试周或截止日期临近时。

例: I usually feel tired when I have a lot of difficult homework to complete. This is especially true during exam weeks, when several assignments are due at the same time, because I start to feel both exhausted and anxious.

提案: 回答提到了刷视频和听音乐，但部分句子难以理解，存在明显的词语选择、语序和语法问题。“people always like me this function”不符合英语表达；“scroll the video”应改为“scroll through videos”；“release my tired”也不自然。建议先说明最常做的事情，再解释这些活动如何帮助你放松，并使用“while”或“because”连接。

例: When I feel tired, I usually scroll through short videos or listen to music. These activities help me switch off for a while and relax after a busy day. If I am extremely exhausted, I also take a short nap.

提案: 回答直接且有个人观点，但“go out... to swimming”搭配错误，应说“go swimming”；“a best way”应改为“the best way”或“a good way”。另外，“release your stress”“help you make happy and make your life”表达不自然，且“always”可能过于绝对。建议说明有时会和朋友出去，并具体解释游泳如何减压，例如改善心情、放松身体。

例: Yes, I sometimes go out with my friends even when I feel tired, especially if we go swimming. Swimming is a great way to relieve stress because it helps me relax physically and improves my mood. After that, I usually feel more energetic.

× I always feel tired and I always think why should I need do so much homework?

✓ I always feel tired, and I always wonder why I need to do so much homework.

这里不需要使用 should；表达“我为什么需要做这么多作业”时，使用一般现在时 I need to do 即可。注意 need 后面接动词不定式时要使用 need to do。

× When I have a lot of homework and the homework sometimes will be uh, difficult to solve them.

✓ When I have a lot of homework and it is sometimes difficult to finish it, I feel tired.

在以 when 开头的时间状语从句中，通常使用一般现在时表示将来或习惯情况，不使用 will。这里应说 it is，而不是 the homework will be。

× When I have a lot of homework and the homework sometimes will be uh, difficult to solve them.

✓ When I have a lot of homework and it is sometimes difficult to finish it, I feel tired.

homework 是不可数名词，后面不能用表示复数事物的 them。可以用 it 指代 homework。

× So I think when I have a lot of homework I will feel tired and anxious.

✓ So I think that when I have a lot of homework, I feel tired and anxious.

这里是在描述通常的情况或习惯，因此主句和 when 从句都可以使用一般现在时。使用 will 会使句子变成对未来某次情况的预测。

× When I feel tired, I think maybe people always like me this function.

✓ When I feel tired, I think that many people feel the same way.

原句的 like me this function 结构不完整，也不能表达“很多人和我一样”。表达相同感受时，可以使用 feel the same way。

× I always scroll the and scroll the video or some listen some music in the radio.

✓ I always scroll through videos or listen to music on the radio.

表示“浏览视频”时使用 scroll through；listen 后面要接介词 to；表示通过广播听音乐时，通常使用 on the radio，而不是 in the radio。

× I always scroll the and scroll the video or some listen some music in the radio.

✓ I always scroll through videos or listen to music on the radio.

这里是在泛指视频和音乐，不需要使用 the。video 和 music 的表达也应根据语境使用复数或不可数形式。

× I always scroll the and scroll the video or some listen some music in the radio.

✓ I always scroll through videos or listen to music on the radio.

原句中 scroll the、some listen 等结构不完整，而且 or 连接的两个动作形式不平行。应使用 scroll through videos or listen to music，两个动词都保持原形。

× I think is the best way to release my tired release my exhausted.

✓ I think this is the best way to relieve my tiredness and exhaustion.

I think 后面的从句缺少主语，应该加上 this，形成完整结构 this is。一个完整的英语句子通常需要明确的主语和谓语。

× I think is the best way to release my tired release my exhausted.

✓ I think this is the best way to relieve my tiredness and exhaustion.

tired 和 exhausted 是形容词，不能直接作 release 的宾语。这里需要使用名词 tiredness 和 exhaustion；另外，表示“缓解疲劳”时，relieve 比 release 更合适。

× Yes, when I feel tired I always go out with my friend to hang out or swimming.

✓ Yes, when I feel tired, I always go out with my friend to hang out or go swimming.

to hang out 和 swimming 结构不平行。or 连接两个活动时，应该使用相同的结构：to hang out or go swimming。

× I think swimming is a best way to uh, release your stress and uh, help you make happy and make your life.

✓ I think swimming is the best way to relieve stress and help you feel happy.

best 是最高级，前面通常使用定冠词 the，而不是 a。表示一般意义上的压力时，stress 通常不需要冠词。

× I think swimming is a best way to uh, release your stress and uh, help you make happy and make your life.

✓ I think swimming is the best way to relieve stress and help you feel happy.

best 是最高级，前面应使用 the，不能使用 a best。也可以说 one of the best ways，但此时 way 要使用复数 ways。

× I think swimming is a best way to uh, release your stress and uh, help you make happy and make your life.

✓ I think swimming is the best way to relieve stress and help you feel happy.

help 后面通常使用动词原形，不能说 help you make happy。表达“让你感到开心”时，应说 help you feel happy；make your life 在这里也缺少补充成分，因此改为更完整的 improve your life 或省略。