Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and well-developed, with relevant reasons and a specific example. However, say “back-to-back consultations” with hyphens, and avoid repeating the idea of being tired and exhausted too closely. “I need to see my patients every weekday” is understandable, but “I see patients throughout the week” sounds more natural. Add a linking phrase such as “As a result” to make the final point clearer.

例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a long day at work. I usually finish late because I have a lot of paperwork and see patients throughout the week. As a result, back-to-back consultations and administrative tasks can leave me completely exhausted.

提案: You answer the question clearly and provide a relevant example. However, “heavy weather training” is incorrect; the natural phrase is “heavy weight training.” Also, “a long treadmill run or heavy weight training” should be parallel in structure: “a long run on the treadmill or a heavy weight-training session.” You could improve coherence by using “especially” before the example and briefly explain why these activities make you tired.

例: I usually feel tired after intense exercise, especially after a long run on the treadmill or a heavy weight-training session. These workouts are quite demanding, so I often feel exhausted for the rest of the day.

提案: Your answer has a clear overall idea and gives two specific ways to rest, but several expressions are unnatural. Say “when I feel really tired,” not “when I feel really tight,” and replace “I will just give some ways to help me rest” with “I try to rest in a few simple ways.” Also, “lie on the bed” is less natural than “lie down on my bed,” and “take a short nap” is the correct collocation. Use “For example” or “If I have enough time” to connect the details smoothly.

例: When I feel really tired, I try to rest in a few simple ways. For example, I might sit quietly with a cup of coffee, or, if I have enough time, I lie down on my bed and take a short nap.

提案: This is a strong, natural answer with a clear contrast and a specific example. The response is concise, relevant, and uses the linking word “However” effectively. To sound slightly more natural, say “decline the invitation” or “turn down the invitation,” and use “a farewell party” rather than simply “a farewell” when referring to an event. You could also replace “then I will still attend” with “I’ll still go” for a more conversational tone.

例: When I’m really tired, I usually tell my friends that I need to rest and politely turn down the invitation. However, if it’s a special occasion, such as my friend’s birthday or a farewell party, I’ll still go because I don’t want to miss an important moment.

× I often feel tired after intense exercise. For example, I usually have a long treadmill run or heavy weather training at the gym, which often leaves me exhausted for the rest of the day.

✓ I often feel tired after intense exercise. For example, I usually have a long treadmill run or heavy weight training at the gym, which often leaves me exhausted for the rest of the day.

Weather training is not the correct expression here. The activity is called weight training, so weight should be used instead of weather. Also, use a hyphen in long treadmill run only if it functions as a compound adjective before a noun; here, it does not need one.

× When I feel really tight, I will just give some ways to help me rest.

✓ When I feel really tired, I just find ways to help myself rest.

Tight usually describes something physically constrained or tense, not a person's general feeling of fatigue. Use tired to describe a lack of energy. Find ways is the natural verb phrase in this context. The present simple just find is also more suitable for describing a usual habit.

× Other times I just lie on the bed to have a short nap.

✓ Other times I just lie in bed to have a short nap.

Use lie in bed when referring to resting or sleeping. Lie on the bed is grammatically possible when emphasizing the physical surface, but lie in bed is the natural expression for taking a nap.