Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then explain the two main reasons: your full-time job and caring for your children. Use accurate expressions such as “I work full-time,” “my child has ADHD,” and “my daily routine is exhausting.” Avoid unclear phrases like “my daily rise” and “some very busy.” Use linking words such as “because” and “as a result” to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I often feel tired, to be honest. I work full-time, and I also take care of my children, one of whom has ADHD. As a result, my daily routine is quite demanding and exhausting.

提案: Your answer is relevant and gives a clear reason, but improve the grammar and naturalness. Say “deal with many issues” instead of “come across a lot of issue,” and say “speaking with clients is what makes me tired the most” instead of “it’s a long day for that make me tired.” Organize the answer with a direct opening, followed by your job-related explanation.

例: I usually feel tired after a long day at work. As an accountant, I have to deal with many financial issues and speak with clients who have different concerns. By the end of the day, concentrating on these problems for several hours leaves me mentally exhausted.

提案: You provide a suitable response and explain your coping strategy clearly. Improve the sentence structure by using parallel forms: “take a deep breath, calm myself down, and try not to think about work.” Use “things that make me anxious” rather than “things that make me feel more anxiety.” You could also add a specific result to make the answer more effective.

例: When I feel tired or overwhelmed, I usually spend a few minutes alone. I take some deep breaths, calm myself down, and try not to think about work or anything that makes me anxious. This helps me relax and regain my energy.

提案: Your answer is direct and includes a clear preference and reason. Correct the grammar by saying “I would rather be alone” and “I don’t like being in a big crowd.” Avoid repeating “when I feel tired” and “go with friends”; use a linking phrase such as “therefore” to make the response smoother.

例: Most of the time, I would rather be alone when I feel tired. I don’t enjoy being in a big crowd because socializing can be even more exhausting. Therefore, I usually stay at home and meet my friends when I have more energy.

× I work full times at the same time.

✓ I work full time, and at the same time, I have to take care of my kids.

The expression full time is fixed and does not take the plural ending -s when it describes how many hours someone works. Use full-time before a noun, as in a full-time job, but use full time after the verb work.

× He got ADHD.

✓ He has ADHD.

ADHD is an ongoing condition, so the present tense has is appropriate. Got is a past-tense form and suggests that the condition was acquired at a specific time in the past.

× Pretty much my day or my daily rise. Exhausted I would say and some very busy.

✓ My daily routine is exhausting, and I would say that I am very busy.

The original wording contains incomplete sentences and does not include the necessary verb in each clause. Use is after the subject my daily routine and am after the subject I.

× You have to come across a lot of issue.

✓ You have to come across a lot of issues.

The quantifier a lot of refers to multiple countable things in this context, so the plural noun issues is required.

× It's a long day for that make me tired the most.

✓ It's the long day that makes me feel the most tired.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure. In the pattern it's ... that ..., the noun phrase is followed by a relative clause. The corrected sentence also places the subject the long day before the verb makes.

× Things that make me feel more anxiety.

✓ Things that make me feel more anxious.

After feel, use an adjective to describe the person's emotional state. Anxious is an adjective, whereas anxiety is a noun. Therefore, feel more anxious is the appropriate form.

× Most of the time when I feel tired I rather be alone.

✓ Most of the time, when I feel tired, I would rather be alone.

The expression for stating a preference is would rather + base verb. Therefore, would must be added before rather: I would rather be alone.