Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly at the beginning, then give one or two clear reasons. Improve verb forms and sentence structure: say “it depends on the day,” “a lot of assignments,” “need to cook,” and “I feel refreshed,” rather than “I feel refreshing.” Avoid ending with an incomplete phrase such as “I’m so busy with.” Also, “winter weekend” is unclear; use “some weekends” or “during the winter.”

例: Yes, I often feel tired when I have a lot of assignments to complete or several chores to do. However, I usually feel relaxed on weekends, especially in winter, because I can stay in bed and listen to music. As a result, I feel refreshed before starting a new week.

提案: Do not repeat or question the examiner’s wording; answer directly with a clear time or situation. Use accurate expressions such as “when I have a lot to do in one day,” “sometimes,” and “exercise for too many hours.” Link the ideas with “also” or “for example,” and avoid vague or unfinished phrases like “that’s it.”

例: I usually feel tired when I have too many things to do in one day. For example, if I attend classes, finish several assignments, and exercise for a long time, I feel exhausted by the evening. Sometimes I also feel tired immediately after waking up, although I’m not always sure why.

提案: Begin with a direct answer instead of “That’s an interesting question,” which is unnecessary here. Use parallel verb forms: “watch a movie,” “eat delicious food,” “go for a walk,” and “go biking.” Correct agreement and prepositions, such as “it makes me feel relaxed” and “walk along the riverside.” Organize the answer with a clear reason and avoid repeating “Riverside.”

例: When I feel tired, I usually watch a movie or eat something delicious because these activities help me relax after a busy day. If I want to be more active, I take a walk along the riverside or go biking. These activities help me clear my mind and regain my energy.

提案: Give a clear conditional answer and explain when you would or would not go out. Correct the grammar in “only if it is an important event,” “sometimes,” “with my friends,” and “it depends on my mood.” Replace “reject them” with the more natural phrase “turn down their invitation.” Avoid the unclear phrase “when I feel tired to my.”

例: Sometimes I do, but only if it is an important event, such as a close friend’s birthday. Otherwise, I usually turn down the invitation because I prefer to rest at home when I feel exhausted. It really depends on my mood and how tired I am.

× I would say it depends the day.

✓ I would say it depends on the day.

The verb depend is followed by the preposition on when we specify what something is influenced by. Say depend on the day, not depend the day.

× I have a lot of assignment to do.

✓ I have a lot of assignments to do.

Assignment is a countable noun, so it must be plural after a lot of when referring to several tasks.

× I need to cooking.

✓ I need to cook.

The expression need to is followed by the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. Use need to cook.

× I have to do a lot of stuff in a day.

✓ I have to do a lot of things in a day.

The phrase a lot of things is a clearer quantifier construction for countable activities or tasks. It is also more natural in this context.

× Some the winter weekend I just relax.

✓ On some winter weekends, I just relax.

When referring to more than one weekend, weekend must be plural. The quantifier some is used directly before the plural noun without the article the.

× I feel refreshing.

✓ I feel refreshed.

Refreshed describes how a person feels after resting. Refreshing describes something that makes people feel refreshed, such as refreshing music.

× I would say it depends the day that I have a lot of assignment to do and need to cooking or do something a lot I feel so tired but some the winter weekend I just relax and lay in the bed listen to music so I feel refreshing I'm so busy with.

✓ I would say it depends on the day. When I have a lot of assignments to do and need to cook or do many things, I feel very tired. However, on some winter weekends, I just relax and lie in bed listening to music, so I feel refreshed.

The original response contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation or connecting words. Dividing it into complete sentences makes the ideas easier to follow.

× Are you saying feel tired when I have to do a lot of stuff in a day?

✓ I feel tired when I have to do a lot of things in a day.

The question asks about a general situation, so use the simple present to describe a regular condition. The original opening Are you saying is unnecessary and does not correctly answer the question.

× Sometimes I exercise too many hours.

✓ Sometimes I exercise for too many hours.

Use for before a period of time to show duration. For example, exercise for two hours.

× Sometime I exercise too many hours.

✓ Sometimes I exercise for too many hours.

Sometimes means occasionally and is the correct adverb for repeated situations. Sometime usually means at an unspecified time in the future or past.

× That an entrusting question.

✓ That is an interesting question.

A singular sentence with the subject that needs the linking verb is. Also, interesting is the correct adjective for describing a question.

× That an entrusting question.

✓ That is an interesting question.

Entrusting means giving someone responsibility or something valuable. Interesting is the appropriate adjective for describing a question that attracts attention.

× Usually go to watch movie or eating delicious food.

✓ I usually watch a movie or eat delicious food.

The original sentence is missing the subject I. A complete English sentence needs a subject and a verb.

× I usually go to watch movie or eating delicious food.

✓ I usually watch a movie or eat delicious food.

The verbs joined by or should have a parallel form. Since watch is in the base form, eat should also be in the base form, not eating.

× I usually go to watch movie.

✓ I usually watch a movie.

Movie is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a movie when referring to one nonspecific movie.

× It make me feel relaxed.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed.

In the simple present, the verb takes -s after the third-person singular subject it. Therefore, make becomes makes.

× It make me feel relaxed.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed.

The singular subject it must agree with the singular present-tense verb makes.

× Sometime biking.

✓ Sometimes I go biking.

Sometimes is the correct adverb for an occasional activity. The sentence also needs a subject and a verb to express the activity completely.

× Sometime biking.

✓ Sometimes I go biking.

The original phrase has no subject or finite verb. Adding I go creates a complete sentence.

× Yes, I do, but only is it is important thing to do or special event.

✓ Yes, I do, but only if it is an important thing to do or a special event.

Use if to introduce the condition for going out. The original phrase only is it does not correctly introduce a condition.

× If it is important thing to do or special event.

✓ If it is an important thing to do or a special event.

Important thing and special event are singular countable noun phrases, so each needs an article. Use an before important and a before special.

× I will go with my friend, but sometimes I will also reject them.

✓ I will go with my friends, but sometimes I will also turn them down.

The pronoun them refers to more than one person, so the noun should be plural: friends. Turn them down is also the appropriate verb phrase for refusing an invitation.

× Sometimes I will also reject them because I don't want to go outside when I feel tired to my.

✓ Sometimes I will also turn them down because I do not want to go out when I feel tired.

The phrase to my is an incorrect pronoun construction and should be removed. The object pronoun them correctly refers to the friends, and turn them down clearly expresses refusing their invitation.

× It depend on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

The third-person singular subject it requires the present-tense verb form depends with -s.

× It depend on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

The singular subject it and the verb must agree. Therefore, use depends rather than depend.