Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Réduisez les répétitions et structurez la réponse : commencez par une phrase principale claire, puis ajoutez une ou deux raisons spécifiques et terminez par une stratégie concrète. Évitez de répéter des mots (par exemple « because ») et limitez-vous à au plus 4–5 phrases. Utilisez des mots de liaison simples pour la cohérence (par exemple « because », « due to », « so »).

例: Yes, I often feel tired because I study for long hours and have many assignments. For example, I sometimes have two lectures back-to-back and little break time. So I try to manage this by taking short breaks and scheduling free time each evening.

提案: Clarifiez le moment et donnez des détails précis : indiquez un moment typique (par exemple « in the evening »), expliquez la cause en une phrase et décrivez une méthode de récupération précise. Évitez des formulations ambiguës comme « sleeping and breakfast » sans ordre logique. Utilisez un connecteur pour lier la cause et la solution.

例: I usually feel tired in the evening after a full day of classes and assignments because I often have back-to-back lectures. To recharge, I take a short nap and then have a light meal so I can relax before studying again.

提案: Complétez et structurez la réponse : commencez par votre activité principale, puis ajoutez une ou deux activités secondaires avec un exemple concret. Evitez d'interrompre la phrase et corrigez les répétitions (« with with »). Utilisez des connecteurs comme « also » ou « sometimes ». Limitez-vous à 3–4 phrases.

例: When I'm tired, I usually rest and sleep to recover. I also like to watch a calm TV show or have a quiet conversation with close friends or family. Sometimes I go for a short walk to feel more refreshed.

提案: Rendez la réponse plus cohérente et claire : répondez directement (Yes/No + brief reason), puis donnez une specificité sur le type de sorties et l'effet sur vous. Corrigez les erreurs de vocabulaire (« convenient and rushed » ne convient pas) ; utilisez « relaxed » or « recharged ». Ne dépassez pas 3 phrases.

例: Yes, I usually still go out with friends because socializing helps me relax after a long day. I prefer low-key gatherings, like going for coffee, which makes me feel refreshed rather than rushed.

× I feel exhausted from studying long hours.

✓ I feel exhausted from studying for long hours.

Using 'for long hours' clarifies duration; original omitted preposition 'for' which is required with 'studying' to indicate time. Suggestion: include 'for' or rephrase to 'after long hours of studying'.

× I feel like I'm drained because because there are many assignments and back to back lectures.

✓ I feel like I'm drained because there are many assignments and back-to-back lectures.

The sentence contained a duplicated word 'because' and missing hyphens in 'back-to-back' which is a compound adjective. Remove duplicate and hyphenate compound adjectives. Also consider 'because of' if followed by noun phrase.

× So I try to manage it by taking free time

✓ So I try to manage it by taking some free time.

This sentence needed the determiner 'some' before 'free time' to be natural in English. 'Free time' is uncountable and often requires quantifier 'some' in this context.

× I feel tired after work and too much pressure of the assignments and back to back lectures.

✓ I feel tired after work because of too much pressure from assignments and back-to-back lectures.

Needed 'because of' to link cause, and 'from' better with 'pressure', also hyphenate 'back-to-back'. The original word order and prepositions were incorrect.

× I try to recharge by sleeping and breakfast.

✓ I try to recharge by sleeping and having breakfast.

Parallel structure requires verb forms: 'sleeping' and 'having breakfast' (or 'eating breakfast'). Using a noun 'breakfast' without a verb breaks parallelism.

× When I feel tired, I love to get some rest and sleep.

✓ When I feel tired, I like to get some rest and sleep.

'Love to' is acceptable but 'like to' is more natural for habitual actions. Grammar type focuses on verb form consistency; both 'get' and 'sleep' are fine, but 'like' fits context better.

× Maybe I can also watch TV and have quiet conversation with with my close people.

✓ Maybe I can also watch TV and have a quiet conversation with close friends.

Removed duplicated 'with', added article 'a' before 'quiet conversation', and replaced 'my close people' with 'close friends' which is natural English. Also ensure preposition 'with' is used once.

× So I

✓ So I usually do those things to relax.

Original fragment 'So I' is incomplete and lacks a verb. Provide a complete sentence that finishes the idea.

× Yes, I would say despite the exhaustion and the tiredness of a long day of work.

✓ Yes, I would still go out despite the exhaustion and tiredness after a long day of work.

Original sentence was a fragment and misused 'would say' without finishing. Use modal 'would' with main verb 'go out' to express hypothetical preference. Also simplify 'the tiredness of a long day of work' to 'tiredness after a long day of work'.

× I prefer going and hang out with friends that makes me feel convenient and rushed.

✓ I prefer going out and hanging out with friends because it makes me feel comfortable rather than rushed.

Maintain parallel gerunds: 'going out and hanging out'. Use 'makes' agrees with singular 'it' or change to 'friends who make' if plural. 'Convenient' is incorrect for feelings; use 'comfortable'. Clarify contrast with 'rather than rushed'.