Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is short, slightly confused by the echoed question, and lacks detail and cohesion. Give a clear direct response, avoid repeating the examiner's question, and add one or two brief supporting reasons or examples using linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) within 3–4 sentences total.

例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially at the end of a busy day because I work long hours. For example, after a full day at the office I usually feel mentally drained, so I try to relax by reading or taking a short walk.

提案: The answer is relevant but too short and lacks specifics. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details about the situations, frequency, or times when you feel tired, and use a linking word such as “especially” or “usually” to connect ideas.

例: I usually feel tired in the late afternoon or evening, especially after a long day at work. For instance, after several hours of concentrated computer work I often feel exhausted and need a break.

提案: This reply is one word and not natural or informative. Provide a complete sentence, describe typical actions you take to recover, and use linking words like “so” or “then” to show sequence. Mention one or two realistic strategies with brief reasons.

例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap or rest for about twenty to thirty minutes so I can recharge. If I can't sleep, I prefer to relax by listening to music or stretching, because it helps me feel more alert.

× Do you have to feel tired?

✓ Do you often feel tired?

The student's response repeats the examiner's question incorrectly by using 'have to', which implies obligation rather than frequency. This is an incorrect use of auxiliary/modal expression and pronoun reference for the intended meaning. Use 'Do you often feel tired?' to match the examiner's original question about frequency. Suggestion: mirror the question's structure and use adverbs of frequency (often, sometimes) rather than 'have to'.

× After doing work.

✓ After doing work, I feel tired.

The original fragment 'After doing work.' is a sentence fragment without a main verb; this is an incorrect sentence structure and missing the subject and verb. It uses a gerund phrase without completing the sentence. Add subject and verb to form a complete answer: 'After doing work, I feel tired.' Suggestion: include the subject and a finite verb to complete the thought.

× Asleep.

✓ I fall asleep.

The reply 'Asleep.' is a one-word fragment and lacks a verb and proper sentence structure. It should be a full sentence that fits the question 'What do you do when you feel tired?' A natural full answer is 'I fall asleep.' or 'I go to sleep.' Suggestion: provide a subject and verb to answer the action taken when tired.