Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct, start with a clear topic sentence, and add a brief supporting detail using a linking word. For example, correct tense and use a linking word to explain why.

例: Not really. I usually get enough sleep, so I rarely feel tired during the day; however, if I stay up late working I can feel sluggish the next morning.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence, fix word order and grammar, and add a specific example with a linking word to make it more informative. Avoid filler words like 'probably' unless necessary.

例: I feel tired when I work all day without taking breaks. For instance, on days when I have back-to-back meetings from morning to evening, I become mentally and physically exhausted.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct punctuation and verb forms, and add one supporting detail using a linking word about nap length or alternative strategies to show range. Keep it concise.

例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap of about 20–30 minutes; if that's not possible, I go for a short walk to refresh myself.

× Not particularly because I got enough sleep.

✓ Not particularly because I got enough sleep.

This sentence is acceptable in past tense if the student means they had enough sleep before; however, the use of 'got' can sound informal. Consider 'had' for formal correctness: 'Not particularly because I had enough sleep.' Use 'had' as the past tense of 'have' for possession/state rather than 'got.'

× The only time that I feel tired probably working all day without getting rest

✓ The only time that I feel tired is probably when I work all day without getting any rest.

Missing verb 'is' creates a sentence structure error and present tense consistency is needed. Also add 'when' to introduce the clause and 'any' before 'rest' for natural quantification. Correct structure: subject + linking verb + complement. Use simple present 'work' for habitual action. Suggestion: Always include a verb after expressions like 'The only time that...' and use 'when' to introduce time clauses.

× When I feel tired I usually take a nap

✓ When I feel tired, I usually take a nap.

The original sentence lacks a comma after the introductory time clause; tense and verb are appropriate (simple present for habitual actions). Add a comma for correct punctuation and clarity. If desired for emphasis, keep simple present 'feel' and 'take' for habitual routine.