Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁、语法更准确，并提供具体细节支持观点。注意使用连词使句子更连贯，例如 because, so, and。尽量控制在不超过5句内，避免重复。（示例：说明一天的具体安排、作业类型或时间分配）

例: Yes, I often feel tired because I spend most of my day studying at the university library. I have a heavy workload, including exams, reports and research papers, so I usually feel exhausted by the evening. For example, I sometimes study from 9 am to 9 pm when deadlines are near.

提案: 注意时态一致性和准确的表达，避免口语填充词。用清晰的时间短语和原因解释何时感到疲惫，并加入过渡词如 especially, because。用更标准的短语替换错误表达（例如 'go into bed'、'finish all my assessments'）。

例: I usually feel tired every evening, especially before going to bed, because I often stay up late to finish my assignments. When deadlines approach I feel stressed and under a lot of pressure.

提案: 回答应更自然、语法正确，并提供具体例子。避免重复与口误，使用正确的动词形式和短语，例如 'chat with friends on Instagram'、'watch films'。可以说明这些活动如何帮助放松。

例: When I'm tired, I usually chat with friends on Instagram or message apps to relax, which helps me unwind. Sometimes I watch my favourite films in the living room because a good movie helps me forget study stress.

× I spend more most of my day studying in the library.

✓ I spend most of my day studying in the library.

句中“more most”是冗余重复，正确表达为“most of my day”表示“大部分时间”。建议去掉“more”。

× I have a heavy workload with my knee assessments, reports and research papers, so I usually feel exhausted by the evening.

✓ I have a heavy workload with my key assessments, reports and research papers, so I usually feel exhausted by the evening.

原句中的“knee”显然是拼写或用词错误，语境应为“key”（关键的）或“many”等量词。此处应改为合适的限定词或形容词。建议检查拼写并使用恰当的词（如“key”或“many”）。

× Actually, I felt tired every day, especially in the evening before I go into bite and I have to finishing my all assessments, you know, So sometimes I even kind of feel stressed and pressure.

✓ Actually, I feel tired every day, especially in the evening before I go to bed and I have to finish all my assessments, you know. So sometimes I even feel stressed and pressured.

1) 时态：句子描述习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时，所以“felt”改为“feel”。 2) 词组错误：应为“go to bed”（上床睡觉）而不是“go into bite”。 3) 动词形式：在“have to”后应接动词原形“finish”，不是现在分词“finishing”。 4) 词序和限定词：将“my all assessments”改为“all my assessments”。 5) 词汇搭配：“feel stressed and pressured”比“feel stressed and pressure”正确。建议注意时态一致、固定搭配和词序。

× When I feel tired, I like chatting with my friends on social media like you like Instagram and we checked.

✓ When I feel tired, I like chatting with my friends on social media like Instagram and we check updates.

原句中“You like Instagram”把听话者误引入，且“we checked”时态不对或缺少宾语，建议简化为“like Instagram”并使用一般现在时“check updates”。同时保持主语一致。

× Sometimes I watching my favorite films in my living room.

✓ Sometimes I watch my favorite films in my living room.

在一般现在时中，动词应使用原形或第三人称单数形式（I 后用原形），不能直接使用现在分词“watching”。建议把“watching”改为“watch”。