Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make the response slightly more concise (max 3–4 sentences) and add a concise example or brief effect to show the consequence of being tired (e.g., how it affects study quality). Use one linking word to connect cause and effect.

例: Yes, quite often, especially recently because I spend long hours preparing for my IELTS exam. As a result, I sometimes feel mentally exhausted and find it harder to concentrate. To manage this, I take short breaks during study sessions so I can remain focused and productive.

提案: This answer is well-structured and specific. To reach a higher score, combine similar points to avoid repetition and add a linking phrase to show sequence or emphasis. Provide one concrete time or example to make it more vivid.

例: I usually feel tired after studying for several hours without a proper break, and especially if I haven't slept well the night before. For example, after an intensive afternoon of classes and revision, I often need to slow down by the evening and relax.

提案: Strong, concise and practical answer with clear sequence. To improve further, use one linking word to show contrast or consequence and include a brief time phrase (how long breaks/naps are) to add specificity.

例: When I feel tired, I usually take a short five- to ten-minute break: I drink some water and listen to relaxing music. If I'm extremely exhausted, I might take a quick 20-minute nap; after that I generally feel refreshed and can concentrate better.

× I spend a lot of time studying and preparing for my IELTS exam, so I sometimes feel mentally exhausted.

✓ I spend a lot of time studying and preparing for my IELTS exam, so I sometimes feel mentally exhausted.

No change needed: 'spend time' is correctly followed by the -ing form (studying, preparing). Keep using -ing after 'spend time'.

× I try to take short breaks throughout the day so that I can stay focused and productive.

✓ I try to take short breaks throughout the day so that I can stay focused and productive.

No change needed: subject 'I' pairs correctly with verb 'try'. This sentence already follows correct third person singular rules.

× I usually feel tired after studying for several hours without a proper break.

✓ I usually feel tired after studying for several hours without a proper break.

No change needed: 'usually feel' correctly uses simple present to describe habitual action.

× I also tend to feel exhausted when I haven't had enough sleep or when I have a particularly busy day.

✓ I also tend to feel exhausted when I haven't had enough sleep or when I have a particularly busy day.

No change needed: mixture of present simple and present perfect ('haven't had') appropriately describes condition leading to tiredness.

× By the evening, I normally feel the need to slow down and relax.

✓ By the evening, I normally feel the need to slow down and relax.

No change needed: simple present 'feel' correctly describes habitual state.

× When I feel tired, I usually take a short break, drink some water and listen to relaxing music.

✓ When I feel tired, I usually take a short break, drink some water and listen to relaxing music.

No change needed: verbs in a list are correctly coordinated; modal usage is not involved here.

× If I'm extremely exhausted, I might take a quick nap.

✓ If I'm extremely exhausted, I might take a quick nap.

No change needed: 'might' correctly expresses a possible action in this conditional context.

× After that I generally feel refreshed and can get back to what I was doing with better concentration.

✓ After that, I generally feel refreshed and can get back to what I was doing with better concentration.

Minor punctuation correction: add a comma after 'After that' for readability. Grammar is otherwise correct: 'can get back' fits present ability referring to the near future; 'what I was doing' correctly uses past continuous to refer to interrupted activity.