Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I often feel tired after a long or stressful day. For example, when I have heavy work or many errands, I feel exhausted, so I try to finish important tasks early and go to bed earlier to recover.

提案: Give a clear time or situation and use linking words to organize details. Correct basic grammar (tense and word choice) and avoid repetition. Provide one specific example to make your answer vivid.

例: I usually feel tired at the end of a very busy workday. For example, after a day of continuous meetings and manual tasks, I feel drained, so I usually do light exercise and take short breaks during the day to prevent extreme fatigue.

提案: Answer directly, use correct collocations and link ideas. State one or two specific actions and explain briefly why they help. Keep sentences complete and avoid vague phrases like "more powerful."

例: When I feel tired, I usually rest and do activities that recharge me. For example, I take a short nap or a hot shower because sleeping restores my energy and a shower helps me feel refreshed and more alert.

× Yes, I felt especially when I had a hard day and difficult day that's make me feel too much too much tired, but I try to control my day to

✓ Yes, I feel tired, especially when I have a hard or difficult day; that makes me feel very tired, but I try to manage my day.

The student mixed past tense ('felt','had') with present intentions ('try') and used incorrect verb forms. The context asks about a general habit, so present simple is appropriate: 'I feel' and 'I have'. Also 'that makes' agrees with singular subject 'that'. Remove repetition and use 'manage' instead of 'control' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent tense.

× Actually, I feel hired when I had very difficult day and for example I work I work I had hard work and I try to manage my day to do some exercises and take rests

✓ Actually, I feel tired when I have a very difficult day; for example, when I have hard work I try to manage my day by doing some exercises and taking rest.

The sentence uses inconsistent tenses ('feel' present, 'had' past) and an incorrect word 'hired' instead of 'tired'. For habitual or general situations, use present simple: 'I feel tired when I have a very difficult day'. Use gerunds after 'by' for activities: 'by doing' and 'taking rest' (or 'taking rests' -> 'taking rest' or 'taking breaks'). Remove repeated fragments. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary and keep tense consistent; use gerunds after prepositions.

× When I feel tired, I try to take a rest and do something help me to be more powerful and more energy. For example, I just sleep or take shower that's helped me so much to be

✓ When I feel tired, I try to rest and do something that helps me to have more energy. For example, I just sleep or take a shower; that helps me a lot.

Errors include incorrect phrase 'take a rest' (better 'rest'), missing relative pronoun and incorrect verb form 'help' instead of 'helps', and wrong adjective 'powerful' for 'energetic' or 'have more energy'. Also 'take shower' needs an article: 'take a shower'. Use present simple 'helps' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'rest' or 'take a rest' sparingly, include 'that' before verbs describing effects, and match verb form to subject for correct agreement.