Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I often feel tired), then give a brief specific reason and one short detail. Avoid filler words like “uh” and awkward phrasing. Also correct grammar (e.g., “I have a headache” and “I am very tired today because I worked a lot”). Use one linking word if adding a detail (for example, “because” or “so”).

例: Yes, I often feel tired. For example, I sometimes work late shifts and by the evening I feel exhausted because I’ve been on my feet all day, and I sometimes get a headache as well.

提案: Answer the question clearly with a time or situation and give one specific example. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “special taste days,” “come home excuse,” “visa”). Use linking words like “when” or “for example” correctly. Keep to two or three sentences and correct grammar (e.g., “I usually come home exhausted after a full day at work”).

例: I usually feel tired after long days at work, especially when I have to work overtime. For example, I often come home exhausted after an eight- or nine-hour shift and sometimes get a headache.

提案: Give a clear routine or actions you take when tired. Start with a topic sentence like “When I feel tired, I usually…” Then list one or two specific actions using linking words (for example, “so” or “then”). Avoid repeating reasons for tiredness and fix grammar (e.g., “exhausted,” “I usually come home exhausted”). Keep it to no more than three short sentences.

例: When I feel tired, I usually rest for a while and drink a cup of tea to relax. If I’m still tired later, I take a short nap or go to bed earlier so I can recover for the next day.

× Uh, yes of course I'm very tired feeling today because I worked a lot and I had headache now.

✓ Uh, yes, of course I'm feeling very tired today because I worked a lot and I have a headache now.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses incorrect word order. 'I'm very tired feeling today' is incorrect; correct order is 'I'm feeling very tired today' (present continuous). 'I worked a lot' (past) is acceptable as background, but 'I had headache now' mixes past and present; use present 'I have a headache now'. Improve by keeping present state in present continuous and current condition in present simple: 'I'm feeling very tired today' and 'I have a headache now'. Suggested practice: form sentences with 'I'm feeling + adjective' for current states and use 'have a headache' for present conditions.

× Today I feel tired because I am special taste days because I have been working long hours.

✓ Today I feel tired because I have been working long hours.

The phrase 'I am special taste days' is ungrammatical and likely a misspoken fragment. The correct reason is expressed with present perfect continuous 'I have been working long hours' to show an action that started in the past and continues to the present, matching 'Today I feel tired'. Remove the meaningless fragment to make a coherent sentence. Suggested practice: use 'I have been + -ing' to explain recent continuous actions that affect the present.

× For example, I usually come home excuse after a full day at the visa and sometimes I even have headache.

✓ For example, I usually come home exhausted after a full day at work, and sometimes I even have a headache.

Multiple errors: 'come home excuse' is incorrect word choice; the correct adjective is 'exhausted'. 'A full day at the visa' is incorrect; likely intended 'at work'. Also 'have headache' needs the article 'a' -> 'have a headache'. The corrected sentence uses proper adjective order and articles and replaces wrong nouns with 'work'. Suggested practice: learn common collocations (come home exhausted, a full day at work) and remember 'have a headache' requires the indefinite article.

× I feel today I feel tired because I have been working long hours.

✓ I feel tired today because I have been working long hours.

Duplicate 'I feel' is a repetition error. Keep a single 'I feel tired today' and use present perfect continuous 'I have been working long hours' to explain the reason. This aligns tenses: present feeling explained by a recent ongoing action. Suggested practice: read sentences aloud to catch accidental repetitions.

× For example I using usually come from exacted after a full day at work and sometimes I even get a day because I work a lot and I'm so tired today.

✓ For example, I usually come home exhausted after a full day at work, and sometimes I even get a headache because I work a lot and I'm so tired today.

Problems include incorrect verb forms and word choices: 'I using usually come' is wrong; correct is 'I usually come'. 'Exacted' is not the intended word; use adjective 'exhausted'. 'Come from' is incorrect in this context; say 'come home'. 'Get a day' is incorrect; intended 'get a headache'. The corrected sentence uses adverb placement 'usually' before main verb, correct adjective 'exhausted', and the noun phrase 'a headache' with article. Suggested practice: study word order with adverbs (subject + adverb + verb), common adjectives like 'exhausted', and collocations 'get a headache'.