Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够清晰且语法错误多，表达不自然。建议：1) 直接给出主句回答（Yes/No 或 I often...）。2) 用一到两句补充原因，使用完整句子和正确词汇（例如 unhappy, the company doesn’t give me what I want）。3) 避免填充词（uh）。练习把想法先在脑中组织成简单句再说。

例: Yes, I often feel tired. I usually feel unhappy at work because the company doesn’t meet my expectations, which makes me feel drained.

提案: 回答零散且含糊，缺乏连贯性与具体细节。建议：1) 用一到两句说明具体时间或情境（e.g. after work, at the end of the day）。2) 用连词连接原因并给出明确细节（because + reason）。3) 避免非完成句，保持句子完整。

例: I usually feel tired after finishing my work at the end of the day because I’m unhappy with my job. Sometimes I also feel tired when I miss my home country and can’t visit.

提案: 回答较为具体但表达不够流畅且有重复。建议：1) 开门见山用一到两个动作回答（I usually sleep and buy food）。2) 使用连接词说明顺序或原因（so/then/because）。3) 删除无意义的填充词并用更自然的短语（go to the supermarket, buy my favourite food）。

例: When I feel tired, I usually sleep first to rest, and then I might go to the supermarket to buy my favourite food so I can relax and enjoy a nice meal.

× I often feel tired, I am not happy, I think company is not give me want. Uh.

✓ I often feel tired. I am not happy. I think the company does not give me what I want.

问题类型：句子结构与动词使用错误。原句包含逗号连接多个独立从句，导致结构混乱；且“company is not give me want”中动词形式和语序错误。应使用第三人称单数现在时的助动词 do/does（company → does not give），并把宾语补全为“what I want”。建议把长句拆成短句，注意主谓一致和正确的宾语从句结构。

× I finish my work. I feel tired because I'm not happy. I think I will. I wanted to go to my country. There is.

✓ I finish my work and then I feel tired because I'm not happy. I think I will go back to my country.

问题类型：句子结构与时态使用不当。原句“ I think I will.” 不完整，缺少动词不定式目的或动作；“I wanted to go to my country.” 用过去时与语境不符，应使用将来或现在的表达；最后的“There is.” 无主语宾语，句子不完整。建议合并相关信息为连贯的句子，使用正确时态（现在/将来）并补全缺失成分。

× Uh, I feel tired. I go to sleep, uh, and uh, I go to supermarket, buy some my favorite food. I'll eat, uh, food.

✓ When I'm tired, I go to sleep, or I go to the supermarket and buy some of my favorite food. I'll eat the food.

问题类型：动词形式与句子结构错误。原句缺少冠词和介词搭配（go to supermarket → go to the supermarket），“buy some my favorite food” 缺少关系或介词，应为 “buy some of my favorite food”；最后“I'll eat, uh, food.” 中重复且缺定冠词，改为“I'll eat the food” 更清楚。建议注意冠词the与短语“some of” 的用法，并把并列动作用 or/and 连接，确保句子完整。