Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用更自然、简洁的句子直接回应问题，减少填充词（like 'umm'）并修正语法错误（如 'very busy schedule' 应为 'a very busy schedule'，'hard to me' 应为 'hard for me'）。可以先用一句话概括，然后用一两句具体补充。例如说明每天的作息或典型任务，以增加细节但不冗长。

例: Yes, I do. I'm a medical student with a very busy schedule, so I often feel tired. For example, I have lectures during the day and clinical shifts at the hospital in the evenings, which leaves me little time to rest.

提案: 回答要更准确清晰，避免不合适的短语（'take away lot of difficult things' 不自然）。用连接词（for example, when, because）组织答案，并给出具体情景（比如考试周、连续值班）。尽量将重复内容压缩为一到两句支持细节。

例: I feel most tired during busy periods, for example during exam weeks or when I have several shifts in a row. When I have many demanding tasks and tight deadlines in the same week, I need to rest afterwards.

提案: 句子结构需要更准确（如 'until it finished' 应为 'until it is finished'），并避免重复（'really feel'）。先直接回答（I usually...），然后用一两句具体措施说明（短睡、散步、安排时间）。使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: It depends. If I have an important deadline, I usually push through and finish the task. Otherwise, I take a short nap or go for a walk to recharge so I can work more efficiently afterwards.

× I have very busy schedule.

✓ I have a very busy schedule.

原句缺少冠词“a”。当名词为单数可数名词（schedule）且表示泛指时，前面需要不定冠词“a”。建议：在单数可数名词前加上“a”。

× it is hard to me to find enough time to have a rest.

✓ it is hard for me to find enough time to have a rest.

中文解释：固定用法是“hard for someone to do something”，介词应为“for”而不是“to/for+me+不定式”。原句使用了错误的介词搭配。建议：使用“hard for me to ...”。

× take away lot of difficult things in a short time.

✓ take away a lot of difficult things in a short time.

原句中缺少不定冠词及短语“a lot of”需要“a”。此外，“take away”不符合语境，应改为“have to deal with a lot of difficult things”。建议：使用“deal with a lot of...”来表达“处理许多困难的事情”。

× I definitely feel tired when I have to take away lot of difficult things in a short time.

✓ I definitely feel tired when I have to deal with a lot of difficult things in a short time.

中文解释：短语“take away”在此处不符合英语表达，应使用“deal with”表示“处理”。同时缺少冠词“a”。建议：将“take away”改为“deal with”，并在“a lot of”前加“a”。

× I must keep working until it finished.

✓ I must keep working until it is finished.

中文解释：从句需要完整的谓语时态。原句“until it finished”缺少助动词“is”，应为被动完成状态“is finished”。建议：在过去分词前加适当的be动词以构成被动或完成时态。

× so umm, it is hard to me to find enough time to have a rest.

✓ so umm, it is hard for me to find enough time to have a rest.

中文解释：此处介词应为“for”，不是“to”。同时“to me”在句型“hard for someone to do”中位置不对。建议：使用固定搭配“hard for me to ...”。

× so that I can work efficiently.

✓ so that I can work efficiently.

原句没有语法错误，但前句“so I can work efficiently”与“so that”都可用。此条用于保持一致性，无需改动。

× I must keep working until it finished. Otherwise I tend to have a small nap or just a little time to recharge myself when I feel really feel overwhelmed so that I can work efficiently.

✓ I must keep working until it is finished. Otherwise I tend to have a small nap or just a little time to recharge myself when I really feel overwhelmed so that I can work efficiently.

中文解释：句中有“feel really feel overwhelmed”重复了“feel”。需要去掉多余的“feel”。建议：将重复词删除，保证动词只出现一次。

× I always have to balance my work and work as an intern in a hospital and my study.

✓ I always have to balance my work as an intern in a hospital and my studies.

中文解释：并列结构混乱且“study”在此应为复数“studies”或用“my studying”。建议：简化为“work as an intern... and my studies”以保持并列名词形式一致。

× take away lot of difficult things in a short time.

✓ deal with a lot of difficult things in a short time.

中文解释：短语“a lot of”前需要冠词“a”，且“take away”不合适，应用“deal with”。建议：使用“a lot of”并选择合适动词。