Tiredness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and a phrase that doesn't make sense ('Developing flew higher'). Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two brief, specific reasons linked by a simple connector. Use correct tense and common collocations (e.g. 'feel tired', 'finish my schoolwork'). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I often feel tired, especially after a long day of studying. For example, when I finish my schoolwork late in the evening, I usually feel drained because I have been concentrating for hours.

提案: The idea is understandable but the sentence has repetition and word order problems ('when I'm when I finish', 'finish what I have food'). Answer directly with a clear time clause, then add a specific reason or example. Use phrases like 'after finishing my schoolwork' and 'after eating a heavy meal' to be precise.

例: I usually feel tired after finishing my schoolwork, especially if I study for several hours. I also feel sleepy after eating a heavy meal because my body diverts energy to digestion.

提案: Your meaning is clear but word choice and formality need improvement ('go sleeping' should be 'go to sleep'; 'reboot' is informal/incorrect for a person). Give a direct main sentence and then one specific activity as supporting detail, using appropriate verbs and simple linking words like 'so' or 'because'.

例: When I feel tired, I usually go to sleep for a short nap to recharge. If I can't sleep, I take a short walk or drink some water to feel more alert.

× Developing flew higher, especially when I finish my school work then I will feel very tired.

✓ I feel more tired, especially when I finish my schoolwork.

The original sentence has incorrect word choices and awkward structure ('Developing flew higher' is meaningless here) and mixes tenses ('finish' and 'will feel') incorrectly. Use a clear present simple statement for habitual feelings: 'I feel more tired' and combine the reason 'especially when I finish my schoolwork.' Also use the single word 'schoolwork.'

× I feel tired when I'm when I finish my school work and finish what I have food too.

✓ I feel tired when I finish my schoolwork and after I have eaten.

The sentence repeats 'when' and uses incorrect phrase 'finish what I have food.' Use present simple 'finish' for habitual actions and correct the verb for eating: 'have eaten.' Place time clauses in a logical order: 'when I finish my schoolwork and after I have eaten.'

× Uh, I will go sleeping or reboot when I feel tired.

✓ I usually go to sleep or rest when I feel tired.

Use habitual present tense for regular actions ('usually go to sleep' or 'rest') rather than future 'will.' 'Go sleeping' is unidiomatic; use 'go to sleep.' 'Reboot' is informal and unclear for a person; use 'rest.' Habitual actions are expressed with present simple, and choose appropriate verbs.