Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 부모님이 어떤 방식으로 가르쳤는지 직접적으로 답하고, ‘put on to be focused on to be’와 같이 의미가 불분명한 표현은 피해야 합니다. ‘tell me to be kind’와 ‘teach me by setting an example’처럼 정확한 동사를 사용하세요. 또한 같은 내용을 반복하지 말고, 부모님의 구체적인 가르침이나 행동을 한 가지 덧붙이면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 효과적입니다.

例: My parents taught me to be polite by setting a good example. They always reminded me to speak kindly and to respect older people. As a result, I learned that being polite was important in everyday situations.

提案: ‘Yet of course’ 대신 ‘Yes, definitely’처럼 자연스러운 시작 표현을 사용하세요. ‘a polite person can get more advice of other people’는 어색하므로 ‘polite people can receive more help and respect from others’로 고치는 것이 좋습니다. 핵심 의견을 먼저 말한 뒤, 사람들의 반응이나 실제 결과를 구체적으로 설명하고 반복과 미완성 문장을 제거하세요.

例: Yes, definitely. Being polite is important because it helps people build positive relationships and gain respect from others. For example, people are usually more willing to help someone who speaks to them politely.

提案: 질문은 ‘어떤 상황에서’ 예의를 지켜야 하는지를 묻고 있으므로, 먼저 ‘when dealing with public officials’ 또는 ‘in formal situations’라고 직접 답하는 것이 좋습니다. 현재 답변은 공무원에 대한 내용은 있지만, ‘government officers should be polite’라는 한 가지 경우에만 집중되어 있습니다. 반복되는 단어를 줄이고, 공무원이 친절해야 하는 이유와 시민이 지켜야 할 예절을 연결어를 사용해 명확하게 설명하세요.

例: We should be polite whenever we deal with people in formal or stressful situations, especially government officials. Many people contact them when they have serious problems, so officials should be kind, patient, and responsible. This helps citizens feel respected and makes the process more efficient.

提案: 과거의 습관을 묻는 질문이므로 ‘I used to say…’ 또는 ‘I always…’를 사용해야 합니다. ‘my parents focus to become a child person’과 ‘I try to sad’는 의미가 전달되지 않으므로 ‘my parents taught me to say “please” and “thank you”’처럼 표현하세요. 실제로 누구에게, 어떤 상황에서 예의 바른 표현을 사용했는지 한 가지 예를 제시하면 내용이 더 구체적이고 자연스러워집니다.

例: As a child, I showed politeness by saying “please” and “thank you” whenever I asked for something or received a gift. I also greeted my teachers when I arrived at school. My parents reminded me to use these expressions every day.

× When I was younger, my parents put on to be focused on to be a kind person.

✓ When I was younger, my parents encouraged me to focus on being a kind person.

After the preposition on, use the gerund form being, not the infinitive to be. The verb put on is also not appropriate in this context; encouraged me clearly expresses the intended meaning.

× So they always said me you have to become a kind person.

✓ So they always told me that I had to become a kind person.

The verb say cannot be followed directly by a person. Use tell someone or say something. In reported speech about the past, have to usually changes to had to.

× So I they cast post on.

✓ So I tried to follow their advice.

The original phrase is incomplete and does not form a meaningful grammatical sentence. Use a complete sentence with a subject, a past-tense verb, and a clear object.

× Yet of course, I think being polite is very important for everyone.

✓ Yes, of course, I think being polite is very important for everyone.

Yet introduces a contrast, but no contrast is needed here. Yes is the appropriate word for agreeing with or affirming the question.

× I think that polite person can get more more advice of other people.

✓ I think that a polite person can get more advice from other people.

A singular countable noun such as person needs an article, so use a polite person. Also, repeated words should be removed. Use from, not of, to show the source of the advice.

× I think that a polite person can get more more advice of other people.

✓ I think that a polite person can get more advice from other people.

Use the preposition from when identifying the people who provide advice. The phrase advice of other people is not appropriate in this context.

× It is very.

✓ It is very important.

The adjective very cannot stand alone because it must modify another adjective or adverb. Add important to complete the meaning.

× I think government officers should be polite because many people meet a government government officer when they have some problems.

✓ I think government officers should be polite because many people meet a government officer when they have problems.

Remove the repeated word government. The singular countable noun officer correctly takes the article a. The unnecessary word some can also be omitted in this general statement.

× When I was a child, my parents focus to become a child person.

✓ When I was a child, my parents focused on making me a polite person.

Because the sentence refers to a past period, use the past-tense verb focused. The verb focus is followed by on, and making is used after the preposition on. Polite person is the appropriate noun phrase in this context.

× So they always said me, you have to be said please and thank you.

✓ So they always told me to say please and thank you.

Use told me to report instructions given to another person. After to, use the base verb say. The passive form be said is incorrect because the student is the person who says the words.

× So I try to sad to please and thank you or time of me.

✓ So I tried to say please and thank you all the time.

The question asks about childhood behavior, so use the past tense tried. After tried to, use the base verb say, not sad. The expression all the time correctly means very often.

× So I try to sad to please and thank you or time of me.

✓ So I tried to say please and thank you all the time.

The original phrase or time of me uses incorrect prepositions and is not an English expression. Use all the time to describe repeated behavior.