Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 단어 선택을 먼저 정확하게 정리해야 합니다. “said me”는 “told me”, “kindness”는 형용사인 “kind”, “police”는 “politeness”로 고쳐야 합니다. 같은 표현을 반복하지 말고, 부모님의 가르침과 그 결과를 연결어를 사용해 2~3문장으로 완성하세요. 답변이 중간에 끊기지 않도록 구체적인 행동이나 상황을 하나 덧붙이면 더 효과적입니다.

例: When I was younger, my parents taught me to be polite by reminding me to treat everyone kindly. They encouraged me to say “please” and “thank you,” so I gradually learned that politeness was important in everyday life.

提案: 의견은 분명하지만 “for everything”과 “good better, better country”는 부자연스럽습니다. “Politeness helps create a better society”처럼 정확한 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 왜 중요한지 사람之间의 존중이나 원활한 의사소통과 같은 구체적인 이유를 제시하고, 미완성 문장으로 끝내지 마세요. “For example”을 사용해 실제 상황을 추가하면 답변의 내용과 논리성이 향상됩니다.

例: Yes, definitely. I think politeness is important because it shows respect and helps people communicate more comfortably. For example, using polite language can prevent misunderstandings at work or in public places.

提案: 질문은 ‘어떤 상황에서’ 예의 바르게 행동해야 하는지 묻고 있으므로, 서비스 관리자뿐 아니라 일상적인 상황도 함께 제시하는 것이 좋습니다. “Service managers have to be polite”처럼 주어와 동사의 수를 일치시키고, “a diverse people”은 “a diverse range of people” 또는 “different kinds of customers”로 고치세요. 구매 상황을 완전한 문장으로 설명하고, 이유와 결과를 연결어로 명확하게 표현하세요.

例: We should be polite whenever we interact with other people, especially in customer-service situations. For example, when buying a product, I should speak respectfully to the staff because they deal with many different customers every day.

提案: 부모님의 조언을 반복하기보다, 어린 시절 실제로 무엇을 했는지 구체적으로 말해야 합니다. “I already talked”와 “shoot me”는 문맥에 맞지 않으며, 아마 “I said ‘please’ and ‘thank you’”를 의미한 것으로 보입니다. “For example” 뒤에는 완전한 예시 문장을 쓰고, 부탁할 때 공손한 표현을 사용했다는 행동과 그 이유를 연결하세요. 답변은 3~4개의 자연스러운 문장으로 마무리하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: As a child, I showed politeness by saying “please” when I asked for something and “thank you” when someone helped me. I also tried to listen carefully when adults were speaking. My parents appreciated these habits because they showed respect.

× When I was younger, my parent always said...

✓ When I was younger, my parents always said...

Parents refers to more than one parent, so the plural noun parents is needed.

× My parent always said me you have to be...

✓ My parents always told me that I had to be...

The verb tell requires an object, such as me. In reported speech, you should also change you to I and have to to had to when the reporting verb is in the past.

× You have to be kindness kind person.

✓ I had to be a kind person.

Kindness is a noun, but an adjective is needed after be to describe a person. The adjective kind is correct here.

× You have to be kind person.

✓ I had to be a kind person.

The singular countable noun person requires the indefinite article a.

× So I thought that police was very important when I was...

✓ So I thought that politeness was very important when I was a child.

The original sentence is incomplete because the time clause does not have a complete ending. Adding a child completes the sentence structure. Politeness is the noun that means the quality of being polite.

× I think that polite makes good better country.

✓ I think that politeness makes a country better.

Politeness is singular, so it is the correct subject and takes the singular verb makes. The adjective polite cannot function as the subject in this sentence.

× I think that polite makes good better country.

✓ I think that politeness makes a country better.

Country is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a.

× Politeness makes good better country.

✓ Politeness makes a country better.

Better is the comparative form needed to compare a country after and before politeness affects it. Good cannot be used in this comparative structure.

× I think service manager have to be polite...

✓ I think service managers have to be polite...

The plural subject service managers correctly takes have. Alternatively, you can say a service manager has to be polite.

× I think service manager have to be polite...

✓ I think a service manager has to be polite...

If you mean one service manager in general, use the indefinite article a before the singular countable noun manager.

× A service manager meets a diverse people.

✓ A service manager meets diverse people.

People is plural and can be used without a before a general adjective phrase. The singular article a cannot be used directly before the plural noun people.

× So when I, for example, when I buy some product...

✓ For example, when I buy a product, I should be polite.

The original is an incomplete repeated clause. A complete sentence needs a main clause, such as I should be polite.

× My parents always said that you have to be a kind person.

✓ My parents always told me that I had to be a kind person.

Tell requires an object, so told me is appropriate. Because the reporting verb is in the past, you should change you to I and have to to had to when reporting your parents' words.

× I talked me, please help me...

✓ I talked to them and said, Please help me.

The verb talk is followed by the preposition to when identifying the listener. The pronoun them refers to the people being addressed.

× I talked to them, please help me, shoot me...

✓ I talked to them and said, Please help me and support me.

A reporting verb such as said is needed before the quoted request. The original wording does not clearly connect the reporting clause with the direct speech.

× Because this word made me awful.

✓ Because these words made me feel awful.

The past tense made is correct for a past experience. Words must be plural because the sentence refers to more than one expression, and made me feel is the natural verb pattern for describing an emotional effect.