Politeness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly by saying who taught you politeness, then add one or two specific examples. Correct the grammar: say “at school,” “made us be polite,” and “asked us to respect others.” Avoid sentence fragments such as “To everyone.” Also, use the past tense consistently because you are describing childhood.

例: I learned to be polite mainly from my parents and teachers at school. They taught me to respect older people, listen carefully, and use polite expressions such as “please” and “thank you.” They also reminded me to be kind to everyone, even when I disagreed with them.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with one focused reason and example. Replace “from small ages” with “from a young age,” “in the society” with “in society,” and “receive helps” with “receive help.” Avoid repetition and hesitation, and do not include an unfinished example. Use a linking word such as “Moreover” or “For example” to organize the answer.

例: Yes, definitely. Being polite is important because it helps people communicate respectfully and build positive relationships. For example, saying “thank you” when someone helps us shows appreciation and can make that person feel valued. In return, people are usually more willing to help us in the future.

提案: The answer is direct and relevant, but improve accuracy and fluency. Say “in a difficult situation” or “when we are angry,” not “in a hard situation” or “in a angry mood.” Avoid repeating “we should be polite,” and correct “There won't There will be.” Add a specific occasion, such as speaking to a service worker or resolving a disagreement, to make the answer more developed.

例: We should be polite in almost every situation, especially when speaking to older people, colleagues, or service workers. This is particularly important when we are angry or dealing with a disagreement. If we remain respectful, we can avoid unnecessary arguments and misunderstandings.

提案: Use a clear childhood example and keep the verb tenses consistent. Say “when someone offered me help,” not “offered me a help,” and use “I learned” instead of “I've learned” when referring to the past. Correct “they make made it a habit” to “they made it a habit,” and replace “keep strong interactions” with “maintain good relationships.” Avoid the fragment “To date.”

例: When I was a child, I showed politeness by saying “please” and “thank you,” especially when someone helped me. My parents and teachers encouraged me to use these expressions regularly, so they became a habit. I think this helped me build good relationships with the people around me.

× Well, I think I first learned it from my parents and then from at school.

✓ Well, I think I first learned it from my parents and then from school.

The preposition from should be used consistently before school because the speaker learned politeness from both the parents and the school.

× Our elders always made us to be polite and they always ask us to respect other people and be kind.

✓ Our elders always made us be polite, and they always asked us to respect other people and be kind.

After make, use the base form of the verb without to: made us be. The sentence also describes a past habit, so ask must be changed to asked.

× Our elders always made us to be polite and they always ask us to respect other people and be kind.

✓ Our elders always made us be polite, and they always asked us to respect other people and be kind.

The surrounding context refers to the speaker's childhood, so the past-tense form asked is needed instead of ask.

× To everyone.

✓ We should be kind to everyone.

To everyone is only a phrase and does not contain a subject and a verb. Use a complete sentence such as We should be kind to everyone.

× Of course, yes, I think it's a good habit which everyone should learn from small ages.

✓ Of course, yes, I think it's a good habit that everyone should learn from a young age.

Small ages is not the correct expression for this meaning. Use the natural phrase from a young age. That phrase describes the period when someone begins learning something.

× It helps us to behave well in the society and when dealing with other people also.

✓ It helps us behave well in society and when dealing with other people, too.

Society is used in a general sense here, so it does not need the definite article the.

× In return we will get the same and we will receive helps from others.

✓ In return, we will get the same, and we will receive help from others.

Help is an uncountable noun when it means assistance, so it should not be made plural with -s.

× For example, when we MMM when when we receive some help from anyone, we can kindly say thank you for their help.

✓ For example, when we receive help from someone, we can kindly say thank you for their help.

The repeated words and filler interrupt the structure of the sentence. Use one clear when-clause followed by the main clause.

× Even if you are in a hard situation or in a angry mood, we should behave well and we should be polite to others.

✓ Even if we are in a difficult situation or in an angry mood, we should behave well and be polite to others.

The subject changes from you to we, which creates an inconsistent point of view. Use we consistently throughout the sentence.

× Even if you are in a hard situation or in a angry mood, we should behave well and we should be polite to others.

✓ Even if we are in a difficult situation or in an angry mood, we should behave well and be polite to others.

Angry begins with a vowel sound, so it must be preceded by an, not a.

× Otherwise there won't There will be unnecessary issues or misunderstandings.

✓ Otherwise, there will be unnecessary issues or misunderstandings.

The sentence contains a repeated and incomplete there will construction. Use there will be to introduce the existence of future issues.

× When I was a kid I used to say thank you when they offered me a help.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to say thank you when they offered me help.

Help is uncountable when it means assistance, so it is not normally used with the article a.

× I've learned it from my parents and from my teachers because they make made it a habit.

✓ I learned it from my parents and from my teachers because they made it a habit.

The answer refers to a completed period in the past, when the speaker was a child. Therefore, use the simple past learned and made.

× I believe it helped me to keep strong interactions with other people even. To date.

✓ I believe it has helped me maintain strong interactions with other people to date.

To date refers to a period that continues until now, so the present perfect has helped is more appropriate than the simple past helped.

× I believe it helped me to keep strong interactions with other people even. To date.

✓ I believe it has helped me maintain strong interactions with other people to date.

Even is incorrectly placed at the end of the clause and does not express the intended meaning. To date should be placed at the end of the complete sentence to mean until now.

× To date.

✓ I believe it has helped me maintain strong interactions with other people to date.

To date is an adverbial phrase, not a complete sentence. It should be connected to a clause that contains a subject and a verb.